1-15 Revamped on.Novel (feedback :slight_smile: )

[Krysteena]

I have don't a lot of hard work to changing quite a bit to make things easier as a reader I would like to here from you!
Chapters 1-15 have been edited to perfection in my best knowledge let me know if anymore changes are needed! Thanks.

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any other also needing this kind of help let me know.

[GiveMeThatBread]

Nice! Re-editing always took me forever because writing style always changes.

I do see places where grammar should be double checked, such as the 3rd to last paragraph in chapter 2 where it says "that's true. I teased. You are short for a guy." I'm assuming the 'I teased' is not part of the dialogue.

Unless you meant "I was just teasing" haha

Its small things that are very missable without an editor or second pair of eyes.

[Krysteena]

Thank you!
I see yes it was meant not for dialogue. Just stating a fact like, she said... I teased him. Still working on that.

[GiveMeThatBread]

In that case, I'd say:

I teased, "That's true. You're short for a guy."

Or

"That's true," I teased. "You're short for a guy."

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