A feedback and review would be helpful

@Ranty-cat Ranty Cat
Tue, 23 Feb 2021 11:42:07 +0000

Yes..Thank you! This helps a lot.

Tbh, I am trying to write in omniscient perspective, but I didn’t know the difference between head hopping and omniscient. I just googled it.

I need to do a bit of a study on it more. xD

And, I really prefer to write in present tense because I am used to playing DnD a lot. So, the style sticked with me.

I see. Will do. I'll modify the starting line. And the suggestions sound splendid to me. I'll incorporate them and update.

Ah, I see now. Adding what Hank is doing is a great way of showing! It's so simple yet I didn’t think of that. Thanks. Will keep the pattern in mind.

That was a really informative feedback. Truly appreciate it. Learned a lot. I'd love to read your novel, but I am an aromantic asexual. So, unfortunately, romance is not my cup of tea.
Thanks a lot again. I'll update it tonight after I am done working on it.