A feedback and review would be helpful

@Ranty-cat Ranty Cat
Tue, 23 Feb 2021 10:03:37 +0000

Actually, I should have mentioned everything that happened in it is within the dimension. I am not describing what happened before they got sucked into the dimension. Thank you. Now I understand the vague part. I will make it clear by saying at the beginning of the italic paragraph at the end that "It took one year for them to build this sanctuary after they spawned in this dimension. The unfortunate event happen one year ago: ". Maybe that will clear things up?

And, thanks a lot for the feedback. It was actually more bland when I first posted it, but after seeing the first review in this thread, I modified it a lot and added more visuals and interactions. Especially the one part that you liked about the duster is part of the new addition.

So, I'd love to know the parts you found bland so that I can try working on them and learn the pattern of what makes something bland to readers and what not.

Umm. Not sure about the targeted audience since I have seen teens who are 13/14 enjoy series like Game of Thrones and Attack On Titan, and adults who enjoy cartoon shows for kids. But, generally speaking, I'd say young adults, probably. This is like Game of Thrones in the post-apocalyptic world. This is Fallout in a different Setting. But, it won't contain any mature love scenes.

Yes, It's a type of introductory episode, but not entirely a prologue. I mean not the traditional type prologues. But, I suppose you can say it’s a prologue by definition.

Yes, I will go in-depth about the dimension and gradually work on the world building over the course of the story flow.