A feedback and review would be helpful

@susannaevanspfw Susannaevanspfw
Tue, 23 Feb 2021 08:50:49 +0000

@susannaevanspfw wrote:

What's the age group this is intended for?

I like the part at the end in italics. I feel like you are going for a bit of a prologue with this? You've described what they are doing before they are sucked into this portal. Got that. Some of your descriptions are vivid, and some you've left a little bland.

I might describe the palisade- dimensions maybe? Just a suggestion. love the bit about the duster. It flowed really well.