A Script for a New Story- Looking For Seinen/Shonen style comic- artist

[thewooda241]

This thread is done.

[Kayke]

Okay. I understand getting frustrated, but your post has been up for less than a day, so there's still hope someone might respond. However, I do have some suggestions. What you've posted is not a pitch, it's a script.

If I were you, I'd write out a pitch. Describe the story, the characters, and the setting in a clear way so that people can get an understanding of it. Also explain the technical stuff like how long you think the project will be, what kind of art you're looking for, and how you'll deal with rights/profits.

Your script could also benefit from a clearer format. There's no official script format for comics, but take a look at movie and film scripts and see how they break down the descriptions and dialog.

I hope that helps some.

[UzukiCheverie]

In addition to what @Kaykedrawsthings explained, many of the artists here are already working on their own series and comics - only a small percentage of them are without a project to work on, and an even smaller percentage of them are actually looking for collaborative work. In this small percentage of people looking for work, they might only be looking for specific types of comics - one-shots, long series, fantasy, romance, manga, realistic, etc. So out of the tiny handful of artists looking for projects here, only a couple of them might be interested in teaming up with you, and that's all based on a number of factors (only a few which I listed above).

As Kay said, give us a title. Give us a description, with a brief synopsis to draw people in (as you would with readers) and genre. Tell us what the responsibilities of the artist will be (sketch work? lineart? Is the comic in color too?). Paid or unpaid. How often would it update? Once a week? Twice a week? Once a month?

TL ; DR Why should these artists be interested in working with you over anyone else? Why should they pick your series to work on instead of the other writers' looking for artists? (this isn't meant as a rude question, it's a hypothetical to help you figure out how to structure your pitch and everything).

And yes, please, don't be impatient when it comes to these things. I know it's hard, especially when you're just starting out, but being impatient will only show artists that you are, by definition, impatient - if they can't trust you to wait for replies in a thread that's less than a day old, then how can they trust you to wait for days for up to possibly weeks for pages to be done? It's all about presentation here. Take a deep breath, forget about all those personal things going on in your life right now (because that's not what any of this is about and it's not our job as artists to account for that, that's on you), and just wait and see what happens. And if no one shows interest, don't panic - there are a lot of writers in your situation right now. Just work on refining your story and just keep on looking, on and off Tapastic - there's always someone.

[tayo_rafferty]

Hey, I reformatted your 'pitch' into a script which I think artist will find easier to understand.

In the future please try and be patient, you can't force people to be interested in your work and having a tantrum will not gain you any friends or collaborators.

Be humble and be patient.

Here's my edit:

Page 1

Panel 1
(Skyline with background of forest and mountains)

News reporter (off-panel): The race for president of Argentina has begun!

Panel 2
(Shows Benito and Santiago standing together at convention smiling).

News Reporter: Representing the Worker’s Party, comes candidates Benito Muirez and running mate, Santiago Alvarez.

Panel 3
(Shows Joaquin greeting crowd).

From the Green Party, comes none other than private entrepreneur, Joaquin Cortazar. These party candidates have won the primary, and shall compete for the general election.

Panel 4

Benito (To Santiago): We could not have made it this far without each other.
Santiago: Obviously. Cooperation and trust is essential to our strength.

Page 2

Panel 1
(Night in neighborhood)(Santiago walking to house)

Panel 2
(Wind grows strong and he falls down)

Panel 3
(Wind spirals around to form a ghost) (Santiago is terrified)

Ghost: Hello there. Don’t bother to know who I am. Just know this: You have until the general election to kill your running mate, Benito. Or else.. you will live eternally.

Page 3

Panel 1
Santiago (shocked and scared)

Santiago: How could I do such a thing?! And isn’t immortality a blessing?
Ghost: Think to yourself. Imagine living to witness everyone you will ever meet slowly age and die, while you remain ageless. Because you are immortal, you will live to see the end of the world. Is that what you would prefer?

Panel 2
Ghost (Disappears)

Ghost: Follow my orders by election day

Page 4

Panel 1
(Morning; Train station, busy atmosphere; Santiago gets off train car)

Santiago (talking to himself): How can I murder him? That’s horrible. I cannot risk facing the consequences. No, someone else must do it.

Panel 2
(Walks away)(Ludivico seen watching Santiago from a distance)

Ludivico (thinking): So Santiago is plotting to assault his own comrade. Disturbing. As Benito’s head security director, I refuse to let this happen….But I should not inform anyone before the election. That might cause a scandal, which might jeopardize Santiago and Benito’s chances of winning. Damn it!

Panel 3
(Hotel where Benito is staying)(Benito walks in with Ludivico, and foreign minister)

Benito(To foreign minister): Cortazar’s fundamental flaw in foreign exchange is his inability to assess diplomatic hostility…(interrupted by Ludivico)
Ludivico: Senator Benito, it is almost 11 p.m. You need rest for your next campaign in Mendoza.
Benito: Oh, right. Thanks for reminding me.

Panel 4
(Woman storms through open door into hotel room)(She throws a knife at Benito)

Page 5

Panel 1
(Benito dodges knife, but woman starts running to him with a gun about to shoot)

Panel 2 + Panel 3
(Woman is disarmed, grappled, and flung out the window by Ludivico)(Benito gasps shocked)

Panel 4
(Santiago rushes in)
Santiago: Is everything alright?
Ludivico: Benito was attacked, but the threat has been secured.

Panel 5
Santiago (looking at Ludivico suspiciously)

Page 6
(Montage of assassination attempts on Benito)(Ludivico saves him from every one)

Page 7

Panel 1
(Palm trees on beach coast) (Ocean waves)(City)(Benito speaking in front of crowd in a building).

Santiago (thinking): In order for my plan to work, I have to get rid of Ludivico.

Panel 2
(Ludivico is in a bathroom washing his hands)

Ludivico(thinking): I can’t tell Benito. He might not take it well.

Panel 3+4
(Mysterious man walks inside bathroom, turns to Ludivico, and sprays a toxin in his eyes)

Panel 5
(Ludivico screams in pain and covers his eyes)(Mystery man leaves)

Page 8
Panel 1
(Mysterious man appears in crowd)

Benito: We cannot afford to cut government spending on education…

Panel 2
(Man aims a gun at Benito)

Panel 3
(Gun fires)(Body falls to the ground; blood spills)

Panel 4
(Dead body revealed to be a security guard who got in front of Benito)

Page 9

Panel 1
(News broadcast declares it to be only two weeks before the general election)

Panel 2
(Hotel; Benito, the guards, and Ludivico sit on couches and watch the television)

Benito (to Ludivico): Did the eye medicine help?

Ludivico: Not much. The doctor’s diagnosis said I am permanently blinded. The medicine can only treat, not cure.

Benito: Sorry to hear that…Get some rest.

Panel 3
(Park. Santiago and girlfriend, Monica sitting together on a bench) (Ghost appears behind them)

Santiago(notices) : Monica, can I spend a moment alone?

Monica: Okay (leaves)

Panel 4
Ghost (approaching Santiago)Santiago (serious look)

Ghost: I came here to confess the truth.

Panel 5
Santiago (shocked)

Ghost: Benito is my son. He lost me in a car accident when he was three years old. That is why I want him dead. So we can be together.

Page 10

Panel 1
(Administrative Building in Buenos Aires)

Ludivico (thinking): In this condition, I am powerless..There is only one thing I can do.

Panel 2

Ludivico (To Benito as he walks by a guard): Senator Benito..There is something you should know. Your running mate, Santiago. He’s the one plotting these assassinations.

Panel 3
(Santiago storms in fast, because he overheard Ludivico)

Santiago: Step back, Benito! He is a liar! He’s the assassin! And I can prove it!
Benito: Umm.. I am afraid both of you will have to be reprimanded and interrogated. Then we will see who the real deceiver is.

Panel 4
(Guards rush in to arrest Santiago and Ludivico)

Santiago(crazed): NO! Let go!

Panel 5
(Pulls out a gun and shoots Benito in the stomach)

Ludivico(in tears): BENITO!

Page 11

Panel 1
(Benito falls over unconscious) (Santiago runs away as guards chase him)

Panel 2
(Santiago jumps through window and climbs up to the roof of building)

Panel 3
(Takes out a cellphone)
Santiago: Hey George, I need to rent that helicopter now!!!

Panel 4
(Helicopter flies and picks up Santiago)

Panel 5
(Helicopter flies over ocean)

Page 12

Panel 1
(Santiago sitting inside helicopter)(Ghost appears)

Ghost: I sense he’s not dead.

Panel 2
Santiago( irritated, aggravated, and psychotic)

Santiago: It’s come to this.

Panel 3
(Santiago grabs a bomb and swallows it)

Panel 4
(Santiago jumps out of helicopter and falls down into the ocean)

Page 13

Panel 1
(Moments later, there is an explosion in the water)

[thewooda241]

Thank you. I'll be more patient next time.

[thewooda241]

Thanks...this was helpful.

[AtaraxiaStudios]

@thewooda241

Your story seems interesting. Yes, you could right it in a better format to show it, but there's important aspects to finding potential artists that you are missing.

A little over two years ago, I was in your situation. Now I'm working with an excellent team of artists.

I made a little guide that might be of use to you. Some practical steps as to how you can go about finding an artists.

I posted it on the forum: http://forums.tapastic.com/t/looking-for-an-artist-tips-on-how-to-find-one/14418

Hope this can be of help, comrade.

Don't despair. Your story can be told. You just have to go about searching for an artist more effectively.

• Varun

[thewooda241]

Thanks to everyone who gave advice.

[60Six]

AND I CAN'T PAY THEM EVEN IF I WANTED TO!

Sorry, but I kind of lost all sympathy for you with this statement. You know, plenty of people come to these forums unable to pay artists but most of them at least plan to some day when the comic "makes it some day" or at least WISH they could. And these people also recognize that not many artists are willing to drop everything they're doing and draw a ton of pages (which is a TON of work) for them for free. If you take a look at all the other "writer looking for artist (unpaid)" topics around here, a big percentage of them don't have people hopping on. And most of them understand that they're asking for lot.
Why would artists want to work for someone who doesn't even WANT to pay them? It's one thing when someone at least says they hope to some day, but no self-respecting artist would ever pick up a pitch from someone who just blatantly stated they have no desire to ever pay the artist for their hard work.

You're angry that nobody wants to do a massive load of work for you completely free? Well, I'm mad that you don't even have the respect to want to pay your artist for their hard work, should you actually get one.

[thewooda241]

Let me rephrase that: I desire to pay them, but I am restricted from doing so.

[thewooda241]

It was the wrong choice of words. That's all. "I couldn't pay them, despite wanting to." That's what I was trying to say.

[60Six]

If that is true, I do revoke some of my statements, however please still do take into consideration what you're asking. Take a look at all the other writers looking for artists (unpaid) topics on here and you'll see the responses are pretty darn limited. Not a ton of people are willing to do such a big project for free (and from looking at your script, it hardly looks like a small task). It's not impossible, but definitely harder. Take the advice from everyone else here and maybe take note from some of the topics that have successfully found artists. I also recommend checking this topic out for further advice:

Thoughts On Collaboration (Writers looking for artists kind of posts and vice versa)

[thewooda241]

Well since this is no easy task, how about we go about this differently. Multiple artists can illustrate different sections of the work. That way, the workload for each person will be reduced.
Now their styles have to resemble each other somewhat, in order to pull off the comic's consistency.
This is only a suggestion, however, and you are free to give me your opinions on this.

[AtaraxiaStudios]

A word of advice. The more people you are working with, the harder it is to coordinate. You are better off finding 1 main artist. Though in order to get that artist, you are going to have to show that you're a trustworthy person and that you can eventually allow the artist to get paid. The artist needs confidence in you, and that confidence should be built overtime.

The confidence in you as a person is more important than their confidence in the success of your story.