Hello! My name's Val (Brazillian, sorry if there are any mistakes with english) and this was a very old thread I started at the start of the year. And now that I've matured not only my art but the story itself, I've decided to post here the revised version of the story.
I hope I can get some critique and new ways to improve!
So, a lot has changed since when I first posted, I will begin with the world:
World
Instead of a world of only cats and dogs, it's a world of personified animals! Different from what you may think, it's not anthropomorphic animals, just humans but with tails, wings, or different kinds of ears. The main couple consists of a Rottweiler (Maximillian or Max for short) and a Shetland Shepherd (Ari, the main character, is inspired by my dog in real life!). The secondary characters are a Mini Pomeranian (Apolo, inspired by my sister's dog), a Siamese cat (Jarva, Max's best friend), and a Snake (Lara, Ari's best friend). I also noticed that the original story didn't have a lot of diversity in terms of skin color, ethnicity and all of that, so I want my characters to be very diverse and interesting overall.
Main Characters
Oh, this is my favorite part!
Ari Valentine
Ari has changed a lot! From the timid unpopular girl, she quickly becomes one of the most influential and wanted girls in her school almost from day one. Her biggest virtues are her kindness and the ability to maintain her humility even though she's very popular. However, her biggest flaw is her difficulty in understanding that not everyone is going to love you, be as nice as you, or think like you. See, Ari lives in a big bubble thanks to her almost perfect life, she subconsciously believes that people will always be nice and have a similar life to her's. Once she starts hanging around Max more, she notices how much she lived inside a social bubble and starts trying to break out of it.
Maximillian Rocha
Max changed a lot too. He is the school delinquent, not necessarily the school bully, but a delinquent for sure. Thanks to a traumatic event in his old school and a few family circumstances, Max hates popular people and acts like a jerk to all of them, the boy also is very physically violent to people that disrespect him, his friend, or people he dislikes. His virtues are being a great artist and a gentle giant on the inside. His biggest flaw is for sure his generalization: "popular people are trash and will try to bring you down" but he also has the flaw of not trying to understand his parents and why they act the way they do as well as not letting them try to understand him, and as a result creating constant conflict in his household.
- Main Plot
I believe it's grown a lot:
Pitch: Personified dogs fall in love.
Description: Ari is the new kid in her school, a new popular kid at that. Maximillian is the school's delinquent who has a great hatred for the popular kids. These two dogs might end up being interested in each other after a single compliment over a drawing.
Main Plot: Ari's mother has moved countries thanks to her work as an artist and was unable to take her daughter with her. The girl ends up going to live with her rich older cousin Apolo in SĂŁo Paulo and changing schools. On her first day, Ari already becomes really popular thanks to her looks and overall character as well as befriending a snake named Lara. On the same day, Ari was leaving the bathroom with Lara and bumps with Maximillian who gives her a menacing stare and doesn't even apologize for letting her fall and hurt her knee, Lara tells Ari who Maximillian is (a delinquent) and advises her to stay away. However, at lunch-time, Ari was avoiding the crowd of students who wanted to befriend her and ends up in an isolated part of the school and sees someone drawing, since she loves meeting new artists thanks to her mom, she approaches the person and compliments their beautiful drawing of a random character, but what Ari failed to notice is that the boy she complimented was Maximillian himself, who awkwardly thanks her and leaves. After that, both of them will get very interested and decide to try getting close.
- Final thoughts
Well... This is all I can offer without getting into spoiler territory.
I hope my story is interesting and that some of you become engaged once I start publishing it. (I just need to finish a few things on the script and soon I will start drawing the first chapter)
I'd love to receive some opinions and critiques. Thank you so much if you read up to this point.
["UM AMOR CANINO" in brazillian portuguese means a "A CANINE ROMANCE" in english]