The characters have great proportions, and you were able to effectively set the perspective of the camera. Good job!
However, I think that the panels are smushed too closely, and thus some scenes overlap with each other (like the bottom half of page 3 of prologue, and page 1 of chapter 1). It was rather confusing to read in that format, so I suggest you to reduce the number of panels in one page and space them up a little bit.
Also, I noticed that the line for the panels are really neat, but the monologue boxes seem to be free-handed. I honestly don't understand why you don't just draw them the same way you draw the panels!