It's good that something is going on from the very beginning, and we have some promising premise for the furhter events.
But there are some things which make your first episode look less dynamic and interesting, than it could be:
- too much text without pictures, between panels;
- some panels are identical or almost identical.
I know that sometimes you don't want to draw boring transitional panels, because you can't wait to go directly to the most interesting ones. But you could invent some details, which would make these panels interesting for you to draw, or just draw something simple, at the very least. I think that almost everything would be more interesting for reader, than just white background or the same picture.
Hope this was helpful!
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