https://tapas.io/series/I-will-Take-what-He-can-Give/info
Please give mine a read. I am looking to improve.
I'm finally at a point in my life where I can publish my work.
Any feedback is welcome.
I read the Prologue and first chapter of your story, "Forty-Seven Flowers"
What I Loved:
What an intriguing world you've built. I went in expecting a medieval style fantasy world, but it was nice to see you've added ideas that make it feel immediately unique (like the airships).
You are also really good at introducing the characters and I felt connected to them and was curious about them immediately.
Constructive criticism:
This may just be me, but something about the lack of commas and the shortness of the sentences in the first paragraph, made reading it feel stilted. I noticed this in a few other places as well. Maybe mixing up the sentence lengths to vary the pace may change this?
Some details like her green scissors felt unnecessary (unless this is a Chekov's gun type thing, in which case, I'm eager to see what you have in store)
Secondly, the part where you described Iliana's shoe could use more show and not tell. One or two other places felt like this too.
But overall, I'm invested in the world you've built and the characters 
Thank you and hope you find some time to read mine!
