Man, this thread is gaining some traction again!
@shiftingverses (The Templars of the Shifting Verse) I took a brief look through your work so far, will go back to sit down and read it all soon. Honestly, I don't have any advice to offer you -- you're very skilled at what you do. Out of all the 'criminally under-subscribed' series I've seen, your's takes the cake. I can only attribute this to a very, very sparse upload schedule. I don't know if you host on other platforms, but updating practically once a year will give you little to no exposure. Participating in the forums will definitely help. I'm looking forward to reading, and waiting for your next update!
@sauropasquini With Casabase, I definitely see the appeal to your format, it's very traditional. I'm not into baseball really, so some of the humor went over my head, and it's always intimidating for new readers to see such a long list of updates (but hey, what can you do?). I do very much like your choice to use color, and following a plot instead of single page gags (though it wouldn't hurt to go back to them once in a while, they were charming!) My main problem would definitely be translation errors, assuming English isn't your first language. I've been told it's a very tough process to get right, perhaps if you know somebody who'd be willing to help with translation, you could work together to smooth out the mistakes. Otherwise, your grasp of motion and composition is stellar, I saw some of your most recent pages, and they had a phenomenal flow to them. I'll keep an eye out for more pages!
@Gaspode12 (All Fingers and Thumbs) You know, I think I have a weak spot for stories with your plot format (each update has it's own little story, but they're all motivated by an overarching story). I meant to only peak at a few pages due to time constraints (i should be doing college work right now hahahahaaaaaaa) but had to eventually force myself to stop reading. I don't know if it's your unique art style or humor or both, but I really like what you have. It almost reminds me of another artist I follow, K.C. Green (specifically his HIAGB series, good stuff!) I can't really offer any constructive criticism at the moment, but I can subscribe!
@wumblebumarts (From The Sky) You've got a solid concept for your comic, I really enjoy the interactions between your characters and the subtle details you put in their expressions, it goes a long way! Their designs are distinguishable enough so that the viewer can tell them apart despite the color being monochromatic, and you are able to consistantly keep them on model, which shows that you've drawn them quite a bit! If I might suggest anything, it would be that the value of the blue you use is a bit light. It's not to the point where I can't tell what is going on, but I feel if you darken it, your characters would stand out more from the background and it'd be easier on the eyes. (Though I think I know what you were going for, they're supposed to be clouds so you wanted a lighter tone. Maybe if you added darker accents to some areas instead?) Another thing -- and I run into this problem too -- your text often overlaps your art. Sometimes it's not too intrusive, but sometimes I wish there would be more space for it. This is as simple as keeping in mind before drawing your panels where you want the text to go, give it some breathing room so it doesn't clash with your art. It's okay to have it overlap, but usually you want everything you put on the page to be motivated, or in other words, put there for a reason. But overall I love your dry humor, your characters are engaging and unique, and I think you can go far with this idea!
@sam1992ca (Swordust) I was particularly impressed by how you handled your world building with this. Through simple off-hand lines of dialogue, and minimalist background work, you made something that's easy to understand and get into. Your line work is on point, and your panel variation is great. One thing I usually don't like in story driven comics is having to look at drawing after drawing of a character/characters from the waist on, from an eye level view. You do a good job avoiding this, so I commend you for that. While reading your first two updates, I constantly wished you had added shading to your line work. It would help a lot with depth and making the whole thing look more polished. I see you started to experiment with it in your most recent update, and it looks good, but I would suggest adding some harder shadows rather than using soft shadows for everything. Personally I use a mix of both, but generally hard shadows is the way to go if you gotta choose one, it just looks cleaner. Also, similar to what I said to sauropasquini, your English gets a little dodgy at some parts. I can tell what you mean, but if you can find someone to help with this area, it would go a long way. Also-also I would advise using a different font for your text. Usually fonts like the one you use are seen as "stiff" or lacking in emotion. If at all possible, I'd recommend doing what I did and creating your own font, here's the link I used so you can do it in photoshop (https://www.buzzfeed.com/nicolenguyen/how-you-do-dat?utm_term=.miNyQkQ72#.bc1Rx7xr4) One more note before I end this ramble of mine, I absolutely love the sequence of the sword flying into the sky, it's really poignant and a good hook to start the story with. Keep at it!
I'm so glad people are eager to share their work on here, there's so much effort and heart in these!
(For those interested, here's my thing. Greengarten. I'm always open to critique as well!)