Welcome back! I hope my advice can help at least a little bit.
First, your inks are well done, and I love your art style. Those ragged, blocky edges and detailed yet stylized character designs give your work a lot of personality.
Problem is, sometimes the art is a little too stylized -- there are a lot of character close-ups that look more like abstract art than, well, characters. Details are great and stylization is great, but most of the time your goal should be, "is this panel easy to understand?", and not just "does this panel look cool"? It would help if you pulled back the camera sometimes, especially at the beginning of a scene. It's best to have at least one panel showing the characters from a distance, so the reader knows what they look like as a whole, what they are doing, and where they are. I found myself getting lost a few times.
Other issues are minor nitpicks. I generally like your colour choices, but you can really take your colouring to the next level with more careful rendering. Research the "cut and grad" method -- it's what colourists at Marvel and DC use. K Michael Russel has tutorials on YouTube if you want to check them out. There are several typos ("wen", "peice") and some missing punctuation, as well as some speech bubbles that are too long for the panels they're in.
Can't say much about the story or characters, as we're only a few pages in, but you've got a really interesting concept, and I for one am really intrigued about how the story will go. I'm sure it will grow into something spectacular!