End of chapter 1 - is it ok so far?

[sirkbirb]

So i just finished the 1st chapter of my newest webcomic and i just wanted to know if it's ok so far, like in the plot and everything

I am [colour]

[amortelito]

Wow, this is original and inventive!! I love the way P introduced himself breaking the third wall. If I had webtoons I would add this to my library. Are you publishing on Tapas in the future?

[DeformedSunflower]

Ahh, an interactive webcomic! Firstly, I should congratulate you for taking up such a risky task, because pretty much everything depends on whether anybody leaves a comment or not--which is quite difficult if you don't already have an established fanbase.

But rather than asking a question every one page, I think it would be better if you guide the readers a little more by giving more narration to the story.
One other interactive webcomic that I know is Your Adventure.

Your Adventure

And as you can see here, the author actually gave a more elaborate setting and narration to the story, rather than one-sentence-situations. I think it would be quite tiring and frustrating for a reader to check up on their phone, just to read such minuscule page.

[sirkbirb]

I publish on tapas aswell already ;D

I am [colour] | Tapas

[sirkbirb]

At first I did ask on every page but now it's less frequent and "Your Adventure" is a little different than what I have. The idea is pretty much the same but my webcomis is less videogame-y but more of a webcomic with an already half set future story but with the voting aspect added so it isnt 100% what i had in mind will actually happen.

Maybe I could post once a week with maximum 7 pages and voting at each update then? So as you said people would get frustrated and to get rid of that, i would update less but with more pages

[Rhonder]

Just finished reading through it, I like it a lot!

I admittedly wasn't super fond of the last few pages: the transition into the random info dump felt pretty jarring, and the info itself feels as though it could have been slipped in during more appropriate points in the story (such as the saturated vs. desaturated color thing, maybe that gets brought up when we see the difference between the types first hand, or when 2 are in the same room, or something. The gender identity thing didn't seem particularly important at all. And I had assumed that Red/Green's intents with Yellow would have been made apparent at the start of the next chapter, etc.)

Not a big deal, certainly, I would just be careful about doing it too much in the future. Omnipotent narration can definitely be an effective tool, but it's not always the most entertaining, especially if the info can be delivered in context later.

I'll end with the fact that I love the art style, general vibe, and now that I'm up -to-date can't wait to vote in the next poll

[amortelito]

Yay!! thanks subscribed!

[gh0stcr33p]

I've already been subscribed to the series and I've seen all of the updates. I'll give some pros and suggestions.
for the pros, the execution is pretty good, and I liked the art and the monochromatic backgrounds. the art style is consistent and simple yet well drawn. however, the quality seems to be in jpg, which makes it kind of a pain to look at. (not the art, just the quality of it). I suggest you upload things in png. also, there were quite a few grammatical errors that kind of threw me off. I also noticed that green's glasses would disappear every now and then..? idk if it's on purpose or just a consistency error but you might wanna check that. I really hope I didn't sound rude, I'm just trying to be helpful . overall, I think your comic was pretty good, and good enough to keep me subscribed to it, but maybe if you follow my suggestions it could be better

[DeformedSunflower]

Aha, I see. Sorry for jumping into conclusions, then.
And yes, people in Webtoon usually prefer less frequent updates, but with longer pages. Tapas readers, though, prefer shorter and more frequent updates. Of course it all depends on your update preference, but I thought that you might want to know

[sirkbirb]

only jpg is allowed on webtoons so no png ;/
as for the glasses, i keep forgetting about them idk why tho
and starting the 2nd chapter, i'll ask my friends to proof read the pages so i don't mess anything up