Thank you so much for the feedback! I'll look into it asap. I found it very helpfull! English is my second language so it could definently need some look-throught. And ofc I will get into giving feedback to as many as I can in this thread. This is a good initiative of a thred tbh!
Here's some more feedback-requests if you'd like to look into it too:
Does one sympathise with the characters enough? Are they intresting so far?
Is it to much dialouge/text? And in this case, do you have any points on how I should brake it down?
Thank you sincerely 