Feedback for my comic! *^*

[Maria]

Hello!! I am here on Tapastic from january i need some feedback for on-going webcomic! ^
https://tapastic.com/series/Sarya--an-unexpected-adventures-in-the-land-of-Sun

Hope you like it! ^

P.s.: I LOVE THIS COMMUNITY <3 <3 <3 <3

[punkarsenic]

so like im Super Tired rn so i cant give decent, indepth feedback but ive seen your comic around and off the bat: colour would do wonders. or if not colour, shading - three tones of grey (or any colour) to bring up your contrast and make things pop a little, makes it waaaay easier to read so ppl can enjoy your great art and interesting concept. like, that banner? thats what ppl expect, art wise, and its really nice, if you could have that throughout itd be great, although i understand if thats too much time to sustain.

[jbladder]

I actually don't know if you need color or shading - but that's just me. I would make sure that each panel has a visual focal point that stands out - maybe because it has a really black or white area or is surrounded by a really black or white area.

What I think is more important is polishing some of the language. There are some grammatical errors and some correct but strange phrases. I don't want to be insulting in assuming this, but it makes me assume the person writing the comic is a non-native English speaker. Whether this is true or not, I would ask for help from someone to proofread each comic before you publish them.

Otherwise, I think your comic looks great! The style is really amazing - keep it up!

[bynuwbis]

Hey there!!

Welcome!!

You artwork look pretty nice!! I would suggest some things to get it even better!

I do think some situations the characters don't highlight enough from the background:

Example:

In some situations you highlighted more the character by giving them a thicker outline! That can be one of the solutions.

But what I Really feel what would improve a lot is some shadow working or coloring!

You can color it in a greyscale do give some depth to the scenes and highlight more the characters or the situations in matter. This would make you art take the next step!!!

But personally I can't stop imagining how cute your comic would look colored! But this is the other way you could go about the coloring part. If you feel you want to stay in a greyscale think about making some special episodes in color! I think your readers would really like it :D!

I think your going in the right direction.

Your art looks really good and you characters are pretty nice too!

GOOD LUCK!

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NuwComics
https://tapastic.com/series/NuwComics

[Maria]

Hello! Thank you for the tip and don't worry you don't insulting (sorry for my english)! A friend of mine has translated episode 1 and 2, she is translator student...D:

Which part is strange? D:

[Maria]

Thank you for the kind words and the tips (i seriously take fact that i'll color an episode maybe the prologue) ! It's true if my comic was colored maybe i wouldn't few readers (ahahah!)... But i have no time to color it.... T.T

(SORRY FOR MY ENGLISH)

[garrenn]

I would agree that some basic colors would do your comic wonders. Depending on how you color and shade, it really doesn't take that long.

[Maria]

Thank for answering me! You say right i have no time to color it...D:

[Maria]

I have an another work and i am little slow...D:

[garrenn]

It's definitely missing... something though. If not color I would at least consider adding some sort of shading. Like hatching or something.

[Cronaj]

Looking at this, art style is very nice! There's a good amount of movement and dynamic poses that lead the viewer's eyes across the page, and I think the paneling looks almost professional. Perhaps the panels are a little cramped on the page for a webcomic, but for print, it is excellent.

I agree with some of the people above though: it would be so much better if it was colored or shaded, or if the characters were at least differentiated from the background elements more. This could also be as simple as making the outlines of the characters thicker and bolder.

In regards to readability, I think the font was a little small and uncomfortable. I was reading it on the desktop site, and it was a bit straining on the eyes. On the mobile app, I can only imagine it being even more difficult to read. There was also a LOT of text per panel. Generally, that much text is a turn off for potential readers. (Because humans are growing lazier and lazier lol). That being said, it might help to simply separate the dialogue into more speech bubbles.

[punkarsenic]

you have solid lines most of the time; what you could do is select areas and then, on a layer behind, fill them in just screen tones. just a little monochromatic shading would be sooo worth the time, even if full-on colour aint.