I really like your story. It is well written and interesting enough to make me keep reading.
My only criticism is, that the paragraphs are quite long, I think especially when there's direct speech you should start a new line/paragraph. I don't really know how to explain it, but you can take a look at how I did that in my chapter. Shorter paragraphs and a clearer structure make the story more pleasant to read (in my eyes).
All in all your novel is quite good, and I'll definitely keep reading, the paragraph thing is really just a tiny critic point.