Feedback on my new comic =D

[defineprog]

I just uploaded the first three pages of my new comic Dies Irae yesterday, and I'd love some feedback. I have 32 pages sketched out for the first chapter, and plan on doing three chapters max. So this one will be kind of short. Any suggestions on an effective upload schedule? Any critique on the art/paneling? Thanks in advance!

[UzukiCheverie]

As for updating schedule, you could do like, one batch of pages a week. Or smaller batches 2-3 times a week (but don't overdo updates, reader burnout is a terrible thing lol). Note: Mondays are really good update days, as well as Wednesdays and Fridays, but weekends are a bit slower (based on what I've experienced and the experiences other people have told). Be sure to experiment with it though and see what works best for your comic!

As for feedback, I like the art style you've got! The only feedback I've got is maybe to vary your line weight a little (as in variation between how thick and thin a line is). It's a little tough to tell foreground elements apart from background elements, just because the lines are all the same weight. Your character, for example, in the first page, could have thicker lines to set him apart from the background.

Along with that, I don't know if you've considered color or not, but if coloring is not an option, you should give screentoning/greyscale a shot. While it's not necessary for a black and white comic, it definitely creates more of a dynamic in your panels, and accents your characters and backgrounds a lot more. Though it does take a lot more time, the difference it can make is quite substantial (speaking as someone who's been doing a lot more toning in the past year of production for Time Gate: Reaper).

That's pretty much all the feedback I've got! Can't wait to see more pages from you though

[defineprog]

Oh hell yeah, thanks so much!

I originally intended on coloring these, which is why the line weight doesn't really vary much. I'm strongly considering it still. I was recently inspired by an artist named Geoff Darrow and wanted to try and emulate his line style, though I realize now that it really only works with color. Guess I have work to do lol

[demthorshie]

I just saw the first page of your comic and your drawing style is very nice! You have a really strong grasp with line art and I don't think you need to make any improvements in that department! However, anyone who knows me knows that I love colors, and lots of them! The only thing I can recommend to you is to maybe try some coloring for future pages and see how you like it. It will really help your art pop out a lot which will also likely draw more readers to your comic.

It's really hard to say much else about your comic at the moment because there's only one page with not much action in it, but you're definitely off to a good start. Looking forward to seeing more soon. :3

[carloswebcomic]

One page is not enough to give substantial feedback, but what I can say is that I feel that your inking needs some work.

Are you inking digitally or with pen and paper?
The lines lack thickness variation and at times there are too many lines that, which without thickness variation, just blend in together.
You seem to have a good grasp of anatomy and proportion with your character but your perspective and backgrounds need a bit more work.

[defineprog]

I ink digitally. But yeah, I understand the line weight criticism. I believe adding color should fix that pretty easily...hopefully lol.

[carloswebcomic]

Are you using a pen tablet? If you are, you only need to use the pen pressure to do some line variation. You can even draw a thicker outline around your characters to make them stand out from the background.

[defineprog]

I am. And the reason for my lack in line weight is because I'm so heavily inspired by guys like Geof Darrow and Moebius, but I didn't realize how much their style relies on color. So I'm adding color and it's making all the difference.

[carloswebcomic]

Yeah, That's a lot better with colour. The lines don't blend with each other.

[jodopsi]

I really like your style! I think a thing that would help is to give thicker lines to the foreground elements (not too thick, just a bit to differentiate from the bg elements) and make the focal point of each panel pop. Keep it up!

[Quetherttigo]

he kind of looks like greyfox

[seraphimcomics]

Hey, if it's not too late, I'd love to give feedback on your comic! I'm hoping someone will do so for me sometime too. http://tapastic.com/series/seraphimcomics

First of all, I love your character and creature design! Wandering ambiguous humanoid with traces of humanity? Awesome. The creatures that follow him are unique too, maybe a little to on-the-nose (there might even be a literal flying nose out there), but very original. The mouth is a good homage to The Maxx, too. I love em.

Well paced. Just enough action and intrigue in the world/characters to get me hooked. I want to see how this chase ends. Who were those vagrants? Why is the world like this? How will biblical verse factor in? Very cool teases.

My biggest criticism is with the anatomy/motion of the characters. The protagonist in mid-walk/run seems very awkward, and not very accurate real running. Its right arm moves forward at the same time as the right leg, and so-on with the left. Should be right leg and left arm forward, the others back. Does that make sense? It's good enough that it reads as to what the action is, but the motion and movement is not correct and threw me off.

I really like the anatomical choices you've made, specifically the protagonist's gender neutrality. That's how it reads to me anyway. I think proportionally it could be a bit tighter, as its head (and the heads of the humans as well) seem a bit big. Almost like children. I'm not sure that's what you're going for.

I'm not one to talk about colour because I haven't found the courage to use it yet. But I will give you a note nevertheless! The colouring is good, but needs to go one or two steps forward: you have found consistent colouring for all of the characters/locations, but now you need to consider area lighting and how it affects those colours. Where is the light coming from? Certainly not the left or right as they are surrounded by buildings. What colour is the light? Is it diffused by clouds or direct sun? Also what colour does the sky cast? These questions answered can/will develop a better atmosphere and tonal quality to the images. A grey day conjures way different feelings than a cloudless sunrise. Things to consider.

But there's definitely enough cool stuff going on that made me subscribe to your comic. Great opener! I look forward to more.

I hope this is helpful to you, friend. If anyone wants to do the same to my work, please feel free! I'm here to get better, it's all new to me.

[jordanthelass]

I really like the art style for sure; but as a previous post mentioned--try using varied line widths. It'll help to establish distance and be easier on the eyes (to an extent.).

There's not much to the story right now to give my thoughts on, but I'm looking forward to it! ^_^