Hey! I love the story idea and how dynamic and colourful this all is - you are really good at drawing expressions! Very fun, thanks for sharing.
One of the main things I would point out is that instead of posting ALL the pages you have at once in one update you should post a few pages every week and space things out 
that is how people will subscribe to see more and keep reading. That's what most people on the site do and it also doesn't "overwhelm" readers (you can take a break and remember where you are easier than having to scroll so far).
Another thing is that you have a lot of text and sometimes it is in italics and sometimes it isn't. Like, when the speech bubble is sideways the text is too, and otherwise it is straight. There is no reason to do this back-and-forth and makes it a bit harder on the eye to read than if it was consistent. Same with font size. Just consider some of the formatting choices.
Overall really enjoyed it though and it's super impressive as a first comic book! I can tell how long it must have taken! Keep up the great work
