[Help] My novel starts slow paced and now jumps from one subplot to another quickly without

@Manyana Mari More
Tue, 26 Apr 2022 01:55:33 +0000

@Manyana wrote:

My novel begins slowly and progresses slowly throughout the first season, and I am now in the second season of my novel. I am on the second chapter of my second season and it already introduces many important things such as:
-----> Character A's demise. This character has never been introduced in the whole book since there's a time skip between season one and two. With his death, another character is introduced that will soon be killed. These characters don't have dialogues or anything. This is how these people are "introduced":

I nod even knowing that he can't see me. "What about Babos?" I start fiddling with my nails.
"Babos is dead," he confirms flatly.
I look over at Ash; he gives me a sidelong glance and raises his brows. I nod again. "Vremo. He's been getting on my nerves lately."

-----> Brother's Second Evaluation. The first chapter of the second season is the three characters going to the temple for the brother's second eval and after dropping him off at the temple's gate, two of the characters go to the guild (which was briefly introduced in season one). And it is here that the aforementioned conversation takes place.

-----> In the second chapter of the second season of the novel, the two characters are also hinting of something greater like, "Prepare yourself," or "We are not yet ready," or "We can make them our paws instead of killing them."

-----> The two characters are also made aware of a "gift" that the "priest" gave to the brother. And there's a hint saying that the "priest" don't usually give "gifts", and it's already established in the first season that these priests don't have "worldly possessions."

-----> One of the two characters is summoned to her father's office and informed of Character A's death, as well as the possible involvement of the other character, Vremo, in that person's death.

A lot has happened in the first two chapters of the book, when the whole first season is slow paced. The first season depicted the MC's confusion, anger, failures, trials, and everything but doesn't really have that "major problem," then come second season, and it feels like all conflicts has been dumped in the first two chapters and it now feels rushed. It also feels like there's two completely different authors writing this stuff (not true, I write this alone, but that's my feeling) because the first one is slow burn and the second one is action packed.

How can I fix this? Help. How can I spread it and tone it down? Or should I go with this action packed "theme" for the second season since the MC already "found her place and accepted her fate" in the end of the first season?