Hey, Kaito26! My name is Vyper, and I see you want a review of your comic, Eunice, so here are my thoughts
I'll separate my review into sections starting with the summary (or description of your comic), the cover art page, the artwork within the comic, paneling, writing (such as grammatical errors and the flow of sentences), my thoughts on the plot line, and finally my overall opinion of the comic.
Here we go!
-Comic Summary-
Believe it or not, the summary is crucial to drawing in readers. After all, this is the first sample of your writing they will read.
"A 14 year old girl named Eunice experiences the crisis of her world. She gets sent to another world by a mysterious man and is assigned with the task to "Destroy Obsos" in order to save her world. She sets out on an adventure to destroy Obsos and save her world."
This is a good start! You clearly state who the main character is, you tell the readers that something has happened to her world, and you also set up potential plot line. Not bad!
While your summary does a great job telling your readers exactly what they can expect from your story, I think it can be rewritten to become more engaging and interesting. Instead, consider this:
"After experiencing a life-altering crisis within her world, 14 year old Eunice is sent to another world by an unknown stranger and is assigned the seemingly simple task to "Destroy Obsos." Adventure and mystery pave the way for Eunice as she struggles to understand the stranger's words while saving her world from oblivion."
I took what little I knew of your comic and tried to simplify the sentences while also adding more adjectives that engage people's attentions. For instance, I combined your first two sentences and added "life-altering" before the word "crisis" in the hopes that it would make whatever tragedy that happened in her world sound more compelling and dramatic. I also combined the last two sentences of your summary since I felt saying "Destroy Obsos" twice was a little repetitive.
Keep in mind that I don't know the direction your story is going, so while I can't directly say that my summary is necessarily "better" than yours, I do want you to consider altering it slightly to make it more tense sounding. I mean, the poor girl was ripped from her world, a world that she grew up in and knows well, and is placed in some foreign land, only given the instructions "Destroy Obsos". That sounds pretty thrilling and terrifying! Give your readers the opportunity to feel those emotions.
-Cover Art-
This is the first example of your art your readers see, and I really like it! I love the colors you used for the background. All of the colors used for your character's clothing are easy on the eyes and don't clash with one another. Additionally, you give your readers a good opportunity to see your drawing style. And last but not least, the title is beautifully done. The colors go beautifully with the rest of the art on the page and it's very easy to read.
There are only two things I want you to consider.
One, I feel your main character, who the comic is about, should be larger! You made her a good size, but in comparison to some of the other characters on the page, she doesn't stand out nearly as much she should.
My second critique, which really is only a small, nit-picky thing and probably stems more from OCD, is to consider that the balance of the page is off centered. There are more people on the right side of the page than the left, leaving the left side with much more negative and unused space. This is a small issue, but I believe that by moving the boy with the red scarf and the girl with pigtails over to the left more and/or making them larger, the overall composition of the piece will improve.
-Art-
I like your anime/manga art style; it fits well with the story you're trying to convey and you do a great job with drawing a variety of poses. You also don't shy away from drawing hands, and while they aren't perfect, I commend you for giving it your all! Honestly, I would prefer someone drawing a disfigured hand than someone who goes out of their way to hide their character's hands.
Some things I noticed, are some inconsistencies with keeping the lines from bleeding outside your panels. This happens a couple times and can make your comic seem less professional and also make your readers feel that you just don't care enough to clean up your pages. There is also one instance where Eunice wakes up from her dream in Chapter 1 (Pg 8-11) and you can see that some of the panel is visible through her shirt.
The few perspective shots of Eunice's arm are a little awkward, as well as image of Eunice summoning the tornado (which I thought the tornado was excellently drawn and super awesome looking, nice!). Consider looking up more references for scenes like this and continue developing your skills.
I challenge you to draw more backgrounds! Most of the time, I wasn't certain of the setting. It's fine to have blank backgrounds every now and then, but don't be afraid to draw, at the very least, an outline of houses behind people to continue to show your readers where your characters are.
-Paneling-
Your paneling style is awesome! You use a mix of boxes and diagonal lines to keep the pages unique and interesting. It was also super easy to follow along with which panel comes next. Paneling can be pretty complex and confusing for most creators, but your panels flow from one to another really well. Honestly, I don't really have much to critique on this subject. Great work!
-Writing-
I won't say I'm a grammar Nazi, but I can appreciate people that use the proper spellings of "your/you're" and "their, they're, there", so thank you SO VERY MUCH that you know the differences between these spellings. Your sentences were easy to read and flowed well. I didn't have to work hard to interpret your meanings. Great work!
The only thing I found awkward about the text was the font used for Chapter 1: "I'm Going to Destroy Obsos!" There is a large gap between the "I" and the "m" and it's a little distracting. This happens a couple more times following the apostrophes in "gold's", "it's" and "we're".
Regarding your text boxes, I found it difficult at times to clearly understand who was talking when. When the girls were fighting over the map on the last update, I couldn't tell who the dialogue belonged to. Try and clear this up by adding a tail to text boxes and have them point to the speaker, preferably in the general direction the speaker's mouth is located.
-Plot-
You have an interesting concept, though I wouldn't say it's original. The trope of "getting sent to another world" has been used countless times before, however this is not a complaint. Tropes are popular for a reason. People like them! This is an opportunity for you to take something that has been done before and convert it into something unique and original. You're already diverging from the trope by making Eunice sent on a mission to "Destroy Obsos" in order to save the world she was originally from (or so I'm assuming?).
Starting off with the dream was interesting, but I found it strange and out of place how Eunice instantly assumes the first guy she sees after waking up could be Obsos. It was also strange that she so willingly followed the orders of her dream, and used her newly gifted magic to start attacking a random man with a tornado of fire.
The fight over the map was awkward. I wasn't sure why these two girls were fighting so hard over a map which doesn't have any significance to us as readers. I understand that Eunice just wants to give the map back to the man, but she thought the man was Obsos not five seconds earlier. It seems strange she is willing to fight someone else over the map. The monster that attacked the village seemingly came out of nowhere, and the map that was so important a moment ago is ripped and then left behind as though it no longer has any significance, which is a little off putting.
On the flip side, your story is still really new and many of the things that I've commented on could be explained later!
-Overall Opinion-
Personally, I like the concept. There is a lot of potential for this comic. The art isn't bad and your writing is easy to read. I'm a huge fan of the whole "adventuring with a group of people to destroy some big bad something/someone" plot.
However, it's too soon for me to say whether I like it or not. I'd have to see more updates to truly know if this is something I would want to continue reading.
In the end, all that I've mentioned is only the opinion of one person. If this isn't the direction you want to take your comic, then that's okay! This is your comic, and you should do what makes you happy! Though I hope some of my words were helpful.
Keep up the good work,
The False Vyper