hello shaylafarley5
I'm glad you reviewed my manga.
I will do my best to review your comic honestly. First of all, your comic is only in the beginning of creation with few pages, therefore my opinion may be a bit incomplete.
As far as the story is concerned, it is very interesting to me for now, there are even some similar elements with my manga (exclusively the social aspect of society).
I like the concept of magic and power in the real world, and also the struggle that people have to defend themselves from it just because they are different or that they are envious. When I think about the story for a bit, it is similar to the one from the X-man films. It's important that you elaborate each character in order to know what are their wishes, fears, ideologies or their change of personality. It is important that each character in the comic is unique. So far, the story is OK, we will see where it will go.
The weaker side of the comic book is the drawing. I'm sure you know that it can be better. In your case, I think that the perspective is the worst side of it.
The perspective inside the frame gives you a three-dimensional look. You should do more on this. Drawing the background is also very important as drawing characters, so pay more attention to it. I know that drawing the background is very boring and hard, but your comic will look much better if you devote more time to it.
The main character is very good and I like him, especially because he has white hair, I love characters with white hair (Bakura, Sesshomaru, Sephiroth, etc.) Also, your drawing of secondary characters should be better. Although they may appear in one frame and never again, you have to improve on them. Take more time and create side-characters.
I do not know your methods (everyone works differently), whether you draw sketches of pages before the final work, I think you should do them because you will be able to see better if something needs to be corrected.
The biggest thing that bothered me was repetition of the same frame. Do not copy the frames and modify them slightly. Try to draw each frame from another angle so you will get a better atmosphere. What you could add is a little more detail.
A very good thing is that you're painting the comic. I am not doing it because mangas are not colored. The shading is very good for now.
A good start with a great potential to be a gorgeous comic. You just have to take more time to dedicate to each page. When the comic book gets more pages and the action evolves, I might do a new review.