It seems like you're asking for critique, so I did my best. It's got some negative points, though, so don't read if you're not looking for that.
I like the premise, but I personally would not follow. The two main issues I see with your comic are
1) The English. The characters don't quite speak like real people- it feels informative and unemotional, and I don't see a lot of your characters' personalities in the way they speak. There are also quite a few grammatical errors and clunky sentences. It seems like English might not be your first language?
2) The pacing. Everything is going by really quickly in the beginning, and I have to make too much of an effort to understand what is going on. This does get better in the later chapters, though.
Overall, it seems like you're trying too hard to get all the plot points down at the expense of spending time on developing your characters and endearing them to the audience. But if I don't like and care about your characters I'm not going to care about the plot either.
Less important, but your art could also use some improvement. It a bit boring- the lighting is always pretty flat, as are the camera angles, and you don't choose interesting color schemes. Also there's some same-face going on, where a few of your characters look identical, save for some color swaps. That's just a matter of practice, though.
That all is just one reader's opinion though, and though I said a lot I don't think you should stop drawing it at all. Just maybe slow down a bit and focus on your characters.
Also I am by no means an expert, so if anyone wants to support or contradict anything I said I think it would be very helpful for EmilTwd to have a second opinion.