I am a first time writer! (help)

[Krysteena]

I know things are slowly progressing and I am happy for that but I have know comments or feed back. I want to improve but I need ideas to do so. Could you read my series and drop a comment on how i could improve or what I good maybe it is my own internal voice but I feel like I suck thanks!

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[BellaTheCow]

Sure I’ll help! I’ll get back to you on this thread once I’ve read it and give you some feedback, I’ll also comment if I can.

[hamzeh-a]

thunder doesnt strike twice?

[BellaTheCow]

Ok so I just got done reading quite a bit of your story and it has a nice flow and is pretty interesting, the only thing I’d advise for you to do is to maybe describe the visual elements a little more so as to help paint a clearer picture in the minds of your readers. Also maybe watch out for your punctuation. Other than that the concept is pretty solid so just keep building onto it. Hope this helps @Krysteena

[Krysteena]

lol I am sorry that made me giggle cute thanks!

[Krysteena]

I had someone comment an realized today I made a big story plot error after going back and re-reading it I see where the confusion was! I was so happy to finally have feed back I totally need it thanks!

[BellaTheCow]

Absolutely, glad I was able to help. Good luck with your story! 🤩