Hi! I really like this thread, for offering critique. Itâs thoughtful and takes time, but I like that itâs so supportive for fellow writers.
It caught my eye so I decided to read a bit of your latest story and I know you said you were looking for feedback as well, so I just wanted to share that I thought it had charm! My one critique, or maybe even just personal preference, is that I find it difficult to read through paragraphs of description right from the beginning. This may be just a personal reason why I struggle reading high fantasy prose, but sometimes I feel that if a story doesnât immediately pull me in with dialogue or quick intrigue/action, then itâs harder to invest time. That said, when the dialogue did start, I was drawn in more than I expected. I felt there was a good flow and suspense hook. Also, I thought your series description was witty. Made me smile.
I hope thatâs not overstepping or anything!
Iâm quite curious about first impressions on my novel, as I havenât gotten specific feedback yet. But I know youâve got a lot on your hands, so no pressure if you donât get to it! I just like that you made this thread.