I'll critique your story summary! [Comics AND Novels] [currently on break due to vacation and internet connection]

[rajillustration]

Oh I'll bite, I just kinda shrug and give up when I write summaries (but I keep it short, at least)

The Shapeshifter's Wife | Tapas

and in case that link shortens the summary (it probably will) here it is in full

"Meredith Thompson's new husband is a shapeshifter. He can hide her human identity and his own speckled past with his magic, but, she can't help but wonder: what is underneath his shapeshifting layers?

This is a fantasy/romance/isekai about deciphering lost histories, fallen hearts, and forgotten recipes.

Updates 2x a month!"

[crowstories]

Cool, I recently had to reword mine after learning that it could be misread as a reincarnation story, so this is helpful.

Elliott is just getting their bearings on life after college when they accidentally invoke an ancient god, setting off a series of events which threatens the very fabric of reality.

Disasters! Cults! Clashing primordial forces! Can this creature of habit learn to embrace the unknown, save the universe, and maybe even forge a lasting friendship along the way?

Chaos Dog | Tapas

Thank you!

[DualDragons]

(sorry, was sleeping xD)

So this one is pretty hard to critique because to me it already feels pretty solid. It tells about the main characters and their traits that are prevalent to the story, and a question for the for which they would need to read. It also doesn't hurt to mention the update schedule so readers have an idea of how frequent updates are.

You could possibly add a stake in the summary (if there are any) to spice things up a bit. Possibly maybe something to do with the shapeshifting.

[DualDragons]

Honestly this is a really good summary. It sets up the main characters of the story, the events that happen and the stakes that come along with it. In five sentences!

The only gripe I have (and that is just my taste so take it with a grain of salt) is the "Disaster! Cults! Clashing primordial forces!" with exclamation marks that I personally find a bit cheesy. Aside from that I think you got a rather good summary, short but sweet as they say.

[crowstories]

Haha, that's fair. It was supposed to be kind of campy, but I imagine it doesn't translate as deliberate to anyone who doesn't know me. Thanks!

[peillustrator]

I hope you're still accepting critique here's my story Teach Me, Ami.

Teach Me, Ami! | Tapas

The summary of Teach me, Ami is that the story is a sci-fi, comedy, slice of life. The story centers around Ami as she tries to balance between a normal life and the misadventures she finds herself in with her adopted brother Koby, who's also an alien. Though the two are very different she tries hard to make this unusual family work out.

[rajillustration]

Thanks! that is helpful, even to know what's working, since there's so much in the story I didn't know exactly what to condense it down to, so it's nice to know that it comes across clearly. Thank you so much!

[samiluu]

I would love it if you took a look at mine, thanks in advance

Black Wings | Tapas

[KUUPID]

Ooh~ This is an interesting thread!

I'd really appreciate it if you could critique mine!

A freedom fighter from 1919 Korea, unexpectedly finds herself in the 21st century! Contrary to what she had anticipated, her country is still governed by a monarchy. While she desperately tries to navigate her new world and find a way back home to her fiancé, Hae-eun is faced with a dilemma: she must become an empress! But will she make it back home, unscathed?

Rose Noble | Tapas

[Insanebaker92]

May I explain my story summary even my comic is in progress?

[Panqiuyan]

mine has two summary you can choose which one you do
History tend to repeat itself. In the magnificent palace schemes, blood sheds and betrayals are the norm. Li Yuan Emperor of Tang Dynasty, Empress Fang and Concubine Wu are in an entanglement. The battle for the position of Empress began. Two sons are born. One innocence ruined and the land turned chaotic. Will the three individuals choose the same choices? Will everything be good or once again blood is spilled?

second one
After a breakup, Lia Lin Ai got into an accident. Strangely, a cupid offers her a second at life, putting her soul into the body of a girl with a similar name. Without the memories of said girl, can Lin Ai live her life? What happens when her old connections come into the picture

[DualDragons]

I'll try and get some more done today:sleeping: just woke up

[DualDragons]

Pretty good summary if I do say so myself, it contains everything that a reader could want to know

You could always try and drop a little more scifi stuff in the summary, since it is a scifi & comedy comic. I'd say you already got the comedy & slice of life part of the summary down pat, why not write some teasers about the scifi part? Like an example of Koby's (odd) behaviour or the alien shenanigans that come with this duo. Just a little teaser to make the reader more curious to read.

[DualDragons]

I think the last sentence of the summary is a bit too long it contains three commas so the sentence reads a little bit difficult for me. I also think the summary could have a bit more pazzaz to match the story.
I'd write it like this:

Amèlia dies and gets sent to Hell, where she has to work under the first and famous Prince of Hell, Lucifer, to pay for her sin of pride.

The glamorous prince plans to make a grand return and conquer Heaven for all of demonkind. But how will he pull off such a large-scale conquest?

This is just an example I wrote but I tried changing it up a little and add a little more spice to it. You could also add how Amèlia aids Lucifer in this or what role she plays in it.

[DualDragons]

Yeah that is fine by me

[samiluu]

Oh this looks perfect! Can I use it? And thank you very much!

[DualDragons]

Of course and no problem

[DualDragons]

The summary reads a little bit difficult for me, probably because it is one wall of text. I think breaking it up in two pieces can make it a little more clearer to read

Let's see...

A freedom fighter from 1919 Korea, Hae-eun, unexpectedly finds herself in the 21st century!
What's worse, she finds her country is still governed by a monarchy!

While she desperately tries to navigate her new world and find a way back home to her fiancé,
Hae-eun is faced with a dilemma: she must become an empress!
But will she make it back home, unscathed?

Just an example, but I broke it up in two parts and changed some minor things.

[DualDragons]

Hmmm both could use some work to be honest, but I'll focus on the second one.

You could make the summary a bit less crowded by breaking it apart in two parts. Content wise I think your summary contains everything I'd need as a reader: the main character and the plot that makes the story special, and stakes that come along with it.

Lia Lin Ai's life is abruptly taken away in an accident after a breakup, before a cupid offers her second chance at life. Accepting the offer, Lia Lin Ai's soul merges with the body of a girl with a similar name.

Is Lin Ai able to live this new life without access to her host's past memories? And how will she deal with old connections coming back into the picture?

Tried to write another version of the summary where I broke up the summary in two and changed it up a little.

[Insanebaker92]

Summary:

Olivia Flynn, 16 years old Swiss, moved to Japan due to her father's business. She was heartbroken from her misfortunes and came across the famous patisserie who tried to console her. What she didn't even know is, that patisserie guy is ACTUALLY her servant and as she met him, her life had turned 180 degree.

What's the story about:

This story is all about summoning the servants using gemstones and the servant fight with other servants and monsters to protect their master. The servant goes isekai from their fantasy world to the human world ( our world ) and the summoner can get the servant either from the internet at 3 a.m or come across them wandering. The people in human world ( our world ) form a pact between a human and servant and when that happens, the servant's vow to protect their master's life. If one of them dies, the other dies as well. Meaning, if the summoner dies, the servant dies and vice versa.