It has a very interesting concept. The comic are short and relatable, but at the same time makes me question about life. I also favour your dark-outlines-and-coloured-background art. Should keep with it!
Although I would actually draw some panels around the pictures, so they don't get jumbled up. It's pretty difficult to identify which picture goes next when they're unorganised, you know?
But all in all, I love the story. Looking forward to your progress!