My first BL comic in webtoon style

[akhayashi]

Hi! So I decided to try my hand in the modern webtoon style, after some years drawing only manga-like pages XD It's a BL story in Xianxia genre (lots of ancient China elements), and I just published the first episode here on Tapas and Webtoon:

Emperor's Murderer | Tapas

I really like how it looks like for now, but since I'm just a beginner in vertical comics, I wanted to know if something can be improved here. Is the readability okay? The pacing and the panels look nice this way? Please let me know what you think about it

[yansusu]

Ah!
Readability was great for me but I don't read on the phone so that's probably expected. And I don't know anything about panels but I liked the first episode. I hope you keep it up!

[Zin_Trollborn]

It's really a beautiful comic you have here
The whole universe where the story is happening sounds very interesting . The art and colors are very pretty and the readability looks perfect to me.
Nice work!

[akhayashi]

I just read it on my phone and the spaces between the panels seems shorter there than on PC. I think that I'll be adding a little more space between them on the next update.
Thank you very much! <3 I'll try to keep weekly updates since the episodes doesn't take much time to be done :3

[akhayashi]

Thank you! The colors are the most difficult part for me XD I'm happy that they look good!

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[akhayashi]

Thanks!

I did it directly on vertical format, it was tricky but I managed to get it right after several sketches XD When I was writing the script for this episode I planned what panels I'd be showing and how they could blend together (I used a lot of black because it's a "flashback" and it shows mostly how the main character died).

I'm bad at explaining things XD But a thing that helped me a lot when planning these panels was reading other webtoons with a similar style, paying more attention to the technical details. I "studied" other people's webtoons to see how they made their panels, so I could get ideas on how to make mine.

[mnne]

Hi! The art and story so far look incredible!

For some of them, the distance between the text and the border of the text box seems inconsistent.

Also, I'm not sure if this is the kind of feedback you want, but if I may make some suggestions, in this sentence:

That technique consisted on accelerating the absortion of the spiritual energy of other living beings, and assimilate it to his own.

That technique consisted of accelerating the absorption of the spiritual energy of other living beings, and assimilate it to his own.

And in the following ones:

imortality → immortality

sworn → swore

Though, I think this is just me being nit-picky.

[jensrichard77]

You did a good job at the vertical thing. Especial the fire on the scrolls.
If I may say something in other feedback, the dead body seems very flat somehow. Like a dead balloon or something.

But anyway. Nicely done and welcome to Tapas where nice people create together.

[akhayashi]

Thanks for the advice! :3 On the next episode I'll check the text boxes and I'll use Grammarly to spot grammar mistakes. English is not my main language, so sometimes I write things wrong XD

[akhayashi]

I don't have much practice on drawing bodies laying, so it really turned out strange lol Maybe using references the next time will help a bit.

Thanks! I'm really enjoying Tapas as a creator, the community here is very welcoming :3

[jensrichard77]

Remember to get Ink support unlocked for Inksgiving

Of course! Any time we host a Support related event, I'm more than happy to manually activate the feature for creators. Just email me at michaelson@tapasmedia.co With the subject line "Activate Support" with a link to your Tapas profile, and please email me with the email account you used to create that Tapas profile.

[akhayashi]

I'm looking forward to that! ^^ If I don't hit the 250 subs milestone until then, I'll contact Michael. Thanks for reminding!