Need Reviews on my Comic Please Thanks

Strawhax 2018-02-19 21:19:53 UTC #1

Hi i'm very new to Tapas and would like some feedback on my comic also if you want you can subscribe to the comic that will make a world of a difference thanks. https://tapas.io/episode/988597

gh0stcr33p 2018-02-20 16:58:08 UTC #2

your comic is excecuted really well. I just think the lines could be a little cleaner, and it shouldn't have to be set as mature for the language.

Strawhax 2018-02-20 17:43:01 UTC #3

yea i know thanks for the feed back as for the mature its because a lot of mature thème are going to happen so that is why i put it but yea

gh0stcr33p 2018-02-20 20:03:13 UTC #4

oh ok
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loopedlepus 2018-02-21 04:54:48 UTC #5

I love the art style so far, keep on going, I'd love to watch this comic grow~

Strawhax 2018-02-21 05:03:55 UTC #6

Thanks so much i'm currently working on doing 3 chapters of just expedition for reasons that will help my comic but when we reach the 4 chapter this is when the plot really kicks in

loopedlepus 2018-02-21 05:05:51 UTC #7

Excellent, and never be in a rush to pull in plot. True you need to bring interest to readers, but this is your story, and you're the captain of this ship. So whichever way it goes, it goes~

Strawhax 2018-02-21 05:07:10 UTC #8

a lot of M rated stuff are gonna happen too but of course i can't rush things

Strawhax 2018-02-21 05:09:06 UTC #9

exactly a lot people keep telling me they want to see the crazy M rated stuff now but it wont make sense in a character development stand point so that is why i never rush my story's but yea also if you have not yet subscribed do so to never miss it

PervertOldMan 2018-02-21 08:40:37 UTC #10

1. TEXT :
Try to avoid using only 1 word for each line, it's hard to read
DON'T
DO
IT
LIKE
THIS

Try to add short words into 1 line
DO IT
LIKE THIS
INSTEAD

2. COLORS :
If you are aiming for webcomic audiences, you should try to add colors, if you don't have time, try to use at least one color, like this

It's easier to get people attentions, screentones is actually means for printing purpose, don't need to force yourself to use them, look like they took you a lot of time.

3. PLOTS :
First impression is important, try to make something interesting to see in the first chapter and make people look forward the the next chapter, explaining the world, 2 guys staring at each other is a little too boring I think.

Heliox14 2018-02-21 10:03:26 UTC #11

Honestly, I like your comic.
It's just that a few things need some work.

The problem that I first encountered was how the comic was read. In the first part, you couldn't make heads or tails of the action: where it began, where it ended, where the viewpoints would change.

And periods. Periods are lacking.

That's all for now, but it shows promise. (+1 sub!)

Strawhax 2018-02-21 17:24:53 UTC #12

Thanks for the feedback i will work on it thanks so much for subbing also my comic is read from left to right

Strawhax 2018-02-21 17:34:01 UTC #13

thanks for the feedback as for the text i will be changing so that its easier to read thanks. as for color the reason why i have not put any color is that i'm going the traditional manga route but i don't know if i'm gonna change it doe i will keep in mind and it takes a lot of time anyways to make just the art. As for the plot you are very right about it i should have made it a lot interesting its just the reason i have not done it its because the first 3 chapters are gonna be prologues and just expedition and character development but i am planning to quickly go over this 3 chapters to go to the real plot of the story. i know that i should have started the plot but its because there is gonna be a massive tone shift and i can't rush it. like for example ( T rated and then M rated ) get it not trying to do a big jump lol

Strawhax 2018-02-21 17:34:39 UTC #14

but THNANKS SO MUCH FOR EVERYONE FEEDBACK IT MEANS THE WORLD TO ME <3