Thank you for waiting! Here is my feedback for the first episode.
You started with dialogue, just as Shriraa has done. Starting with dialogue is harder to nail due to the feeling of being thrown into the story. While this can be a good thing, especially in a first scene where you need to establish a hurry, but you should still take care to orient the reader asap. This can be done through a small description as the character gathers her stuff in a hurry and rushes downstairs. Which is what you have done, so good intiution on that front!
If you want to make the descriptions stronger, I'd recommend shortening the distance with your character. Try not to use "I think to myself", "I did this" etc. These remarks create distance between the reader and the pov character and it doesn't seem like something you want in this particular story as the author.
The transition from driving to arriving was abrupt. I would have liked to see more of it, at least in order to orient myself in the story.
MC wipes a tear from her eye, which was also abrupt for me because I assumed she was only thoughtful, not about-to-cry.
Yellow bag, yellow umbrella...Sounds like she likes yellow! It's not beaten over our head and is a great way to introduce some personality to MC, great job!
I don't know if this is a cultural difference but my parents would have seen me off, definitely. So it was surprising that her mother didn't even leave the car.
Final thoughts: I would recommend studying your pacing. I used to suck at pacing and it hasn't gotten easier in all this time. Some things, we have to be conscious of as we edit because they're our blind spots. I think something is brewing between Lily and Anne and it's fun to read. Good work, you got this! 
