One Compliment, One critique Game

[TrustyShamrock]

@Pandastrophic
compliment:
wow theres a bunch i like about this comic but if i gotta pick 1 thing i really like the pets. muffins is hilarious and teacup is so cute. and its great how much mihai loves muffins. it speaks to my soul
critique:
i dont really like the lettering ya got going on. i think it looks ok in the extras but not as much in the actual pages. maybe somethin cleaner or thinner since the linework is so thin?

heres mine: Robo Hole

[redsblueyoungster]

@pearl1

The lines might seem stiff since I use the curve tool in Manga Studio 5. I use the tool mostly because my hand is kinda twitchy so I can't outline too effectively. Thanks for the shadows tip, it really makes a difference.

[monotone_ink]

I read through the first chapter and skimmed through some of the later pages.

The Good stuff:
I think your art style is very appealing, and I really like your use of colours. As pointed out by one of your readers, you do your lighting really well, especially in dark scenes like the one in the first chapter.
Your writing is also well-paced and at a comfy tempo that I can read it with ease. I also really dig the concept of Geckie's character (can't say too much though, wouldn't want to spoil the rest of the thread)

Criticism:
There aren't any glaring issues, but I would say for a goal in terms of art, try to work on improving perspective. I noticed that a lot of your backgrounds can sometimes be quite straight on. Other times, many of the lines look too parallel that it is a bit uncanny. It's overall not that detrimental to your work, but with some improvement, it can enhance it to whole new levels. When you get the confidence, try to play around with camera angles as well.

Hope you find something useful in my 2 cents.

Now, this one is really old and complete trash, but I don't think it'd hurt too bad to get some feedback on it: https://tapastic.com/series/SHADE

I'm currently working on a one shot to enter on a shonen jump competition, so any feedback that will help is appreciated

[Merle]

Great that it helps

[aFistFull]

@monotone_ink

Compliment:
Despite not being someone who knows a lot about manga I do consider myself to be fairly familiar with the art style and its nuances and I'd say that your comic is very much in line with what I usually see. A big well done on that.

Critique:
However, as much as I like your pencils/inks I do feel that the textures that you use become a bit overpowering at times and almost blur the action.

Here is my comic: Batman: Tales of Gotham City.

[Arkulus]

Compliment: I Love how dark the comic is. it really captures how dark Gotham city really is, and getting to know more about the villains rather than the great bat himself is very interesting. Its always great looking through the views of the villains/side characters

Critique: The character designs could use some work, i personally dont like the look of them. I guess it adds to the horror factor of the comic but some of them are just ugly

My Comic: https://tapastic.com/episode/484938

[TrustyShamrock]

WOWWW thanks so much this is awesome and helpful and really nice C:

[monotone_ink]

No problem, I wish you the best

[hdvictor]

Compliment: For a black and white comic, I love your use of color and shading. There's always a clear distinction between characters and the backgrounds regardless of how light or dark they are which is great. The story also looks promising so far, I like your writing. I'm interested in finding out where the story is headed. I also thought the text was a bit weird at first but, you know what? I think it actually works for this comic.

Critique: The intro took a bit too long, which I see you already mentioned in one of your comments how the beginning is always boring. Maybe you could remedy that by posting the first few pages as one episode instead of splitting up all the pages like that. It might be easier for readers to get through that whole intro in one sitting without having to click to see the next page.

Best of luck on your comic!

Here is mine: Random Time Encounters
(try not to judge based on the first few episodes, my art was pretty bad in the beginning)

[Arkulus]

Thx for the advice! I made sure to do that right away. maybe now ill catch more interest.

Good luck with your comic too man ^^

[ChipGod]

Compliment: I like the Legend of Zelda feel. It really makes it feel natural and like its an actual game. I really enjoyed the pixeled version in the beggining. That sealed the deal.

Critique: The characters need to have their own personalities. Capelin has one, but Gunk and Nestin are nearly the same.
Other than that, i like your comic!
https://tapastic.com/series/The-Way-of-the-World
My comic

[hdvictor]

@Zachlowry98 I checked out the changes and the intro flows by MUCH smoother, definitely an improvement. Glad I could help.

@LukeisBootiful Thanks a bunch, I'll definitely work on differentiating their personalities .