Please review my book description! Is it interesting?

@elyanor433 Elyanor
Tue, 27 Jan 2026 14:22:58 +0000

@elyanor433 wrote:

I believe the first line should capture the most intriguing aspect of the story. There’s no need to explain all the settings in the summary after the hook. Once the first line pulls the reader in, you can introduce details that build context and deepen interest.

Example:
Impersonating the legendary fighter who also happens to be her mother is the only option left for Kiera Moss, the sole heir to the company leading the fight against monsters emerging from red portals.

After that, you can add other details gradually. Remember, complex and unique elements of your story shouldn’t be introduced all at once—it only creates confusion. You can mention that Kiera is trying to uncover what happened to her mother, but there’s no need to specify exactly how she impersonates her or the precise mechanics of how the monsters are fought.