Oh hi, I remember you too! Thanks for the critique you gave back then, it led to some helpful revisions.
So!
There's a lot to like about your story.
I think having each chapter start with a new character's POV is a fun format to play around with, especially when it comes to having a ton of characters with unique histories, mindsets, and abilities. You've made several deliberate choices that set the story apart from the rest and make it unique. This kind of story is a good way to flex your ability to portray voice.
The heavy lean on dialogue makes this feel a lot like a black-box play, which is when the story is told entirely through the actors and dialogue. There's minimal props (or they're pantomimed) and the stage has zero set dressing.
As a result, anything you do describe is going to have maximum impact, and invested readers will look for meaning in it. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, and you can easily use this to your advantage to draw your reader's eye exactly where you want it. It can go wrong though. For instance, by the end of Jamie's chapter I don't know their pronouns or physical appearance, I only know that they're wearing a hoodie, and you described exactly one part of Phoebe's body as having a taste, so I'm led to believe Jamie is a mystery creature that's especially interested in the taste of feet. I feel like the prioritization of detail was a little off.
Overall, the concept is extremely promising as a medium for your characters to grow and further introduce themselves, and their actions are intriguing and dramatic. Be on the lookout for ways to display voice, and be mindful of what you do or don't choose to describe.
