Reboot of novel. Asking opinion about new cover [CLOSED]

@domisotto Domisotto
Mon, 18 Jan 2021 14:48:03 +0000

@domisotto wrote:

uglygirlnextdoor:

Dalia Queens and Nicholas Petrichor are on their journey to kill humankind's greatest dream. Will they oblige Mother? Or can they be more than the darkness we fear?

For a loigline I always suggest avoiding questions and too many characters. I suggest the focus to be on the character that will hit the relatable or want to know about them vibe. For that, you need to tell in two or three words what is so special about them.

Something emotion stirring and specific will do, along the lines of:

When her control-freak of a mother sends Dalia on the journey to kill mankind's dream to leave the collapsing Earth, she gets her one chance to break free of the gaslighting she was subjected to for years. As the leash is slipping, she faces a choice--to unleash her powers to become the terror of every sentient being in the universe or gut herself to save complete strangers.