Reboot of novel. Asking opinion about new cover [CLOSED]

@domisotto Domisotto
Mon, 18 Jan 2021 15:28:55 +0000

@domisotto wrote:

uglygirlnextdoor:

Written under an epic poem, this is the love story "When Death meets Chaos." Dalia Queens and Nicholas Petrichor are on their journey to kill humankind's greatest dream.

Follow Dalia's growth from her birth until her ascension where she will be given the task by the planet itself. "Chaos is born, and what a disgrace for the human race"

It just feels disjointed to me, with nothing flowing from one point to another, creating the momentum and interest. Your first sentence doesn't address me as a reader, it sounds more like something you would read in a review. Do you need to mention it at all? I would leave it to the style of the description to convey the epicness of the story.

"When Death Meets Chaos" play on romcom tropes does capture my attention, so I would start with it, as a premise of a love story.

Dalia's and Nicolas' love is an epic struggle between Death and Chaos. The chaos reincarnate, the disgrace of the human race, Dalia, recieves the ultimate task from Mother-Earth. She must destroy humanty's eternal dream (to do what???) with Nicholas' help.

...at this point, there is the description of characters and the premise starts to become clear.

What still remains unclear, is the specific obstacles Dalia must overcome and what is the specific, easy to grasp, relatable consequence of her failure to do so, to give the description the urgency, the plot spine. That will make me want to find out if Dalia is up to the snuff, and root for her.