Share your prologue that's done or a WIP of it

[kyupol]

Prologue starts here

Read AngHell Dela Blackpill :: ADB prologue scene 01 | Tapas Community

[animamundisoulworld]

I'm getting a decent feeling for the future dynamics of the characters pretty well. I think the dark humor was pretty balanced too.

[jwabeasley]

The pictures are great, and there's nothing wrong with any specific part. On the other hand, I'd drop the comic as a reader, long generic prologues are a big red flag for me. Is there a way to tell this prologue in 2 images or less, and get on to the story? I think all the reader needs to know is that the descendants of the gods are being actively hunted, and that would likely be better told organically as part of the story.

Consider the following opening scene:
Protagonist guy is getting chased by some hunters. "Get him, he's a god-descended!"
P-guy: They're hunting me, because my ancestors did this. Wide shot of a piece of the heaven-chandelier thing busted up over a giant crater that is the setting of our first fight.

Something like that would tell the audience everything they needed to know much more efficiently, and let us get to the story part. General good comic advice is to get to your protagonist (who are they and why should we care) as fast as possible.

Since you asked for some shares, this is my comic:

Read Etherwood | Tapas Web Community

This is as close to a prologue that I have in that comic:

And here's a WIP!

[animamundisoulworld]

Being a large lord of the rings fan I've adopted some of that slowness in the beginning. Some will say generic or perhaps done in a classic way. Now I know it's a turn off for some people especially whenever the first few chapters are made, especially since a corner stone is character growth. I definitely understand the points you made and respect that you went out your way to offer your advice. Thank you

[animamundisoulworld]

I'll respond on your comic when I'm not so tired ( almost 1am)

[nellyyism]

AH I just realized we can also show our prologues here too XD
Here is where mine starts out! It's broken into page updates!

Read Those Who Answer the Night :: Prelude-Page 1 | Tapas Community

[melonparfait]

I think your prologue @animamundisoulworld evoked some good atmosphere and emotion. I definitely felt curious to see what it had to say. Perhaps I would shorten it a little - maybe go until "until silence ruled the world". It feels suspensful to that point and doesn't explain too much! The rest of that could be worked into some dialogue in the story! I think readers generally are a bit sated on the "storybook" intros, where lore is explained at the start through exposition. That doesn't mean it shouldn't be done or can't be done! But it can be a bit tricky to find the right balance as to not "say too much". But also, always create what make YOU happiest. It does have a good flow and and keeps it snappy. The strcuture at the start and the chains in the clouds as well as the hand in the grass do create intrigue. I wish you all the best for your project!!

Oh, and here would be our comic (: the first chapter is kind of the prologue but we cut it into multiple parts for weekly updates.

Read Trinity Saga :: Chapter 1: Free Fall (1 - 4) | Tapas Community

[animamundisoulworld]

I think it's pretty nice so far, the only big thing is maybe re-upload what you can into strips instead single image uploads. It seems promising keep going

[animamundisoulworld]

Thanks for the response, I think I can shorten / cutout maybe 20 to 30 or so words out of it. The prologue is definitely a balancing act, trying to say something that would be in the background of the reader and characters minds. I believe either at the end of the prologue or at beginning of chapter one that the end of that war has been around 700 years.

[animamundisoulworld]

Your comic has a soft blend of the older cartoon network shows. I feel like the 2000s teen titans would give some inspiration for backgrounds. Your characters feels like they share 10% DNA from the Sym-Bionic Titan show. ( no I don't only wacth shows that have titan in the title lol) you made a lot of content for awhile so maybe re-upload most of them into longer strips since there is a lot you completed. You done a pretty good job and I hope you complete it someday.

[MattiesMoments]

Here's the prologue to my dystopian novel, Veil of Ashes.

Read Veil of Ashes :: Prologue | Tapas Community

[jwabeasley]

Thanks for reading it! I'm doing stacked pages on the Webtoon mirror, but unfortunately single page updates are what I can do on a consistent weekly basis.

[animamundisoulworld]

You do a great job telling how nearly every aspect of living in this new world is filthy or how things are decayed yet still slightly useable for these people. The Prologue however has so much in it I would qualify it as bonus content or something along those lines, perhaps have half the info be found as revelations to the characters along the journey.

I read a few pages after the prologue and you have become more refined in your work quickly so your already progressing at a good pace. There is a movie not exactly similar to yours as in it is insanely dark, Its called "The Road" a 2009 film. But it was a book first written by Cormac McCarthy. I hope you continue your work.

[AlSanders]

Hello everyone, my story is called The Shadow of Spirit. I know you don’t know it yet, but through it I want to make my dream come true — I want to see my story turned into an anime. I know the chances are small, but I want to try, so please take a look at it.

The story follows the revenge journey of Kaito, a boy who has lost everything. It’s filled with compelling characters like Yume, and intriguing villains such as Shirogane.
Link to story: https://tapas.io/series/The-Shadow-of-Spirit-

[Rilicular]

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[animamundisoulworld]

I do like the medieval style you chose for the first page. And your premise is enforced by the fact you don't shy away from how brutal these monster's fight. Take your time and I think the flow for the narrative will develop nicely.

[animamundisoulworld]

I definitely get the feeling what is written is the thought's she has exactly in the moment. not like she wrote in a journal later then its what we are reading. almost like we get her immediate perception's.

[animamundisoulworld]

I do see how scene by scene it does feel like it has anime like story beats. It seems the world in story structure feels small but will expand at a moments notice.

[ambermdo]

Here's mine, but it's still in progress

Link: https://tapas.io/episode/3729711

[animamundisoulworld]

Link is not working not entirely sure why