Here we go, just by one chapter. You honestly conveyed a lot of emotion and that's not an easy thing to do, especially in a short story. Plus, I am starting to feel bad for the characters already, and that last line... honestly hits hard, and in a way, it implied plenty of things which makes me want to read it even more.
"Once upon a time there were 4 boys, who loved each other too much but not enough"
This one-liner has honestly plenty of deep meanings in it, and it does show more of a complex side instead of all the romantic side which is often portrayed in stories. So that's definitely a nice change of pace for starters, and I literally just binge read the entire thing, so... good work, definitely looking forward to more of it in the future
(Side note, would you like to check out mine? There's now 2 episode, and the second one being part 1 of the Origins of Silent Whispers)