Thanks for the feedback ^^
Well, I wanted to keep it under 5 minutes with that one so I had 0 time to pause given how much there was to cover (I actually left out a major plot element on purpose as a result)
Well, with that one I had been a long time reader of it and got pretty engrossed in the story. I hadn't really ever taken a step back to look at it objectively and did find some things I didn't think quite worked, but nothing that took away from the experience of reading the series as a whole. I mean I could have easily ranted about the cool parts for twice as long and I decided that could get boring fast. I figured I'd just mention it at then end.
This is something I want to work on the most. I had a much longer version of the script for both that went into that stuff but the recording of that version was a little less than 20 minutes and editing that would have been more than I figured I was capable of at the time. I had just gotten Premiere Pro and figured starting small was my best option.
I'll try to do that more in the next one (there's quite a few characters in the suggestion I already chose so I want to actually shed some light on that part. Thanks for yours by the way, I'll read through when I can ^^)
I really want to go back to that series sometime when it's done and give it another try becuase, hopefully, by that point I'll have gotten all this down and worked on a more set format.