Hmmmmmmm after taking a look, it seems like your characters are explaining the actions that are happening rather than just relying on reader getting their actions from the visuals of the comic. For instance in the script you have this:
Snapdragon: BARK BARK BARK!
PNL 4: The trio get excited and go to see what Snapdragon found.
Monsoon: Hey look, Snapdragon found something! I hope it’s something valuable this time...
Zephyr: Knew that mutt was good for something...
The characters have already noticed that the dog has seen something, so them mentioning it feels kinda clunky. Instead it could go something like this:
Snapdragon: BARK BARK BARK!
PNL 4: The trio get excited and go to see what Snapdragon found.
As they head over, Monsoon bends down to rub the excited dog's head: What'cha got for us boy?
Zephyr to the dog: Finally earning your keep then?
Snapdragon barks happily at Zephry
In this example, you get more of a sense of the characters and their personalities as well as a possible history. Maybe go back through the script and see where you can workshop it so that the characters say less about what they're doing and instead try and inject some banter. This might help you connect with them more.