What do you think was your most unique idea, or best-written line/scene?

Leyelle 2024-05-30 16:22:57 UTC #21

This is my absolute favorite line in "Toy Cars"

"He smiles back at me now, and his eyes squint like he’s staring at the sun."

This line is so much deeper and reveals a lot more about the character narrating it than you'd think at first glance.

Leyelle 2024-06-14 16:03:15 UTC #22

So far in "A Dozen Morning Glories" I think the best written line, or one of them anyway, is probably this line from the first chapter (coming out this Saturday)

In the end, it makes no difference. I couldn’t have any less appetite for dirty water than I have for champagne

Leyelle 2024-06-22 14:21:23 UTC #23

This chapter is one of my proudest works, and favorite chapters I've written for the novel so far.

one line from it:

Turning to my easel I set up a clean canvas and mix two little pools of acrylic - a cocoa brown bath and a baby pink one - so much more delicate than I can fathom - and I touch my brush to the canvas.

This is laughable.

The petals melt into themselves - too much water - collapsing faster than I can convince them there’s a reason to keep trying to be beautiful - each one perfectly defective from the first second of their conception-

There will be no fruit.

The tree is broken.

It’s dying.

And I don’t know how to fix it. How to save it -

So I leave it to keep weeping. Falling to pieces like blushing ashes falling from the top of the canvas to the base like the burning rain and embers after a wildfire-

And go to bed.

Leyelle 2024-07-18 14:34:51 UTC #24

Well, I won't spoil scenes that aren't released yet too much but I'm very proud of a scene in an upcoming chapter of "A Dozen Morning Glories" where my FL goes off on a mental tangent of what we can consider "real" and what we can't.

If I laugh, isn’t it a ‘real laugh?’ If I kiss you, isn’t it a ‘real kiss?’ If I love you, isn’t it ‘real love’ even if it doesn’t look anything like what you wanted or imagined it would be?

Leyelle 2024-08-14 14:31:54 UTC #25

While i don't know if it's the most unique scene in the story overall, the opening scene of "Crystal Blue" breaks away from my typical way of starting a story by starting out with a pretty intense action scene. We get less than one sentence of introduction before the action starts lol. then she's being chased through the city by the 'blind' man and his dog

Leyelle 2024-09-02 16:01:21 UTC #26

I think the turn of events in "Walking Grafitti" is very unique, courtesy of my little siblings' suggestions. they are geniuses.

I asked them, "why would Christopher George cut himself shaving?' and they suggested he get spooked by a snake. They didn't even know yet that dragons in the world of my story can turn into snakes. That's just how smart they are.

Leyelle 2024-09-22 13:05:06 UTC #27

adding in Rudy Carmichael in this chapter, to this day, is one of the most unique and interesting ideas I've added to the story so far, i think. Anyone who has read the story will know why her name is kind of a big deal

I think I force a smile as he waves to a lanky Japanese-looking teenage girl with a blonde ponytail.

“Zoe, please get Miss Palmero to the makeup chair, and get her a water while we wait for Abdul and Miss Carmichael.”

Carmichael?