I know adding bush to people's faces was often a trick people used to make their characters look like they have more life to them, but it should never just be focused on just the cheeks ad nose. If you wanna use that trick again try adding dark red shadows, or color to only people's ears lips, and fingers.
I like the second one, especially since the shadows look more grey instead of a dark orange so they look a little unnatural, for a horror comic that's good and adds more of that dreary feeling you're looking for