Am new on tapastic

[leoeffizy]

hii guys am new to tapastic and i just wanted to say hii !!
http://tapastic.com/series/spirit
i would love to hear your honest opinions thanks.

[Down_the_Rabbithole]

Hi! Welcome to Tapastic! I'm somewhat new myself, only having started last month.

Anyway, on to the review!

I like your concept. I think a lot can be done with that idea. I also like the gray-scale values, they look nice.

As for stuff to improve on, I have a bit of a list:

-Your buildings and other things look flat in 3D space or don't match the perspective at all. Be very careful with perspective. I know it's not easy--it's kind of hard for me too. Always plan your perspective, especially for an exposition shot.
-Your grammar could be better. Please have someone read over your stuff and double-check for you. It'll look less sloppy that way and your dialogue will be easier to understand. If English is not your first language, then it might be better for you to start out in your native language and translate it later.
-DON'T USE COMIC SANS! I know the font has the name "comic" in it, but that doesn't mean it should be used for comics or anything at all, really. It doesn't look good. It just makes everything feel cheap when you use it. If you want a new font, you can find some free ones here: Blambot.com
-Your human anatomy is okay in some places, but there are other places it starts to look goofy. I notice you're having difficulty with arms, hands, occasionally elongated torsos, and faces in profile. Try working from reference until you get those elements down.
-Try to keep your lines and shading inside the panels. It looks sloppy if you don't do that.

I hope this was helpful, fellow newbie. I'm trying to get better at my stuff, too.

[leoeffizy]

yea thanks for the advice. backgrounds are a major issue for me. though am better now than i was when i did these pages.
i never knew comic sans wasnt good, that definetely surprised me. and i've done so many pages with it. this was very helpful actually, i havent had critisism on my work yet. trust me i know the art isnt great. but i just wanted to get started instead of pocastinating. again thanks very much i really apprciate

[Down_the_Rabbithole]

You're welcome!

And don't be worried about "procrastinating" when you're making something for yourself. Creative endeavors take time to cultivate and develop. I sat on my own idea for a year before I started making the actual comic (and I'd originally intended to animate it, but thought that comics would be much more manageable). In that time, I've made huge improvements in both my writing and drawing skills. So, take your time with it. You don't have a deadline, so you can take it easy. The people on this site are very understanding if you've got to miss days or change your uploading schedule for whatever reason. You can take long hiatuses and they'll totally understand! Don't stress yourself about it.

[ChipGod]

My name is Luke, and my comic is: https://tapastic.com/series/The-Way-of-the-World
Your comic has the right aspects, but its not something i could get into. The story is too drawn out too quickly.
Maybe its because i dont like reading these types of comics. Could be.
If you just keep at it, then itll grow. I guarantee it
If you have any questions, i can answer them

[VikiKuli]

Hello! I run the comic Wednesday7 and I joined Tapastic around...4 months ago? Wow time flies! Anyways, here's my little bit of critique/advice for your comic.
I adore the general simplicity of your style, and where you add details they seem to draw attention and add importance. I also think your expressions are well thought through. As stated by @Down_the_Rabbithole, maybe work a bit on studying perspective. I suggest that maybe try using a simply 3-d modeling program, like Google Sketch up to help learn that and even build models/camera angles that can be referenced for the comic layouts. Anyways, that my little piece of advice, best of luck with Spirit, it looks like it has potential!
--VikiKuli

[SynergyEclipse]

Hi! Your comic has an interesting concept to it, and I like the art style, but the dialogue is hard to read, and a lot of punctuation and capitalization are missing from it. Is there someone who can proofread the dialogue for you? People here may also offer to help if you'd like. Perspective is difficult, but as you draw more and study it, you'll become more familiar with it. You can use 3D modeling programs to show buildings and rooms in perspective, or take, and study photos to show how buildings, objects and people would appear in perspective.

[Emma]

Hello, I am Emma and I run Friends or Lovers?!

I like your art style! However, the dialogue has a lot of grammatical errors such as punctiuation and capitalization. I will suggest that you get it proofread. I really like that you take on the challenge of drawing in perspective despite it being super difficult, so thumbs up there! There are several programs that can help you with things such as perspective.

[leoeffizy]

thanks very much. i am agressively learning perspective. i will check out these google sketch up. never really heard of it.

[leoeffizy]

i have thought off it before but i dont know how i can get someone to proofread it for me. i went over the dailogue a lot i cant believe i forgot to capitalize it.thanks for letting me know. i can work on that now. thanks

[leoeffizy]

@EmmaItoh. i will work on the punctuations. the capitalization was just me forgetting about it. weird habit of mine, i literally write like that , got my teachers furious all the time, anyways thanks for the the advice

[leoeffizy]

@LukeisBootiful i appreciate your opinion, not everything is for everyone. i wanted to ask how do i add the link to my comics on my profile.

[lukas3]

Speech bubbling is pretty awkward but storyline looks well planned and developed!

I don't use speech bubbles in my comic

[ChipGod]

Link your comic to your forums account? Copy and paste the URL

[leoeffizy]

i think not using speech bubbles in your comic works, however it wont work on mine, it would be too confusing as to who is speaking. how long have you been on tapastic, if you dont mind me asking me asking

[leoeffizy]

i've tried but it didnt work out. maybe am doing something wrong

[ChipGod]

What exactly are you doing, then?