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Leyelle
Apr '24

A tricky one right? but maybe it'll make people curious about the finished product:

This is direct from my folder/doc with all my breakdowns. I swear in execution it's a lot less cringe then it seems when you read the plot points lol.

My fellow writers! go forth and embarrass yourself, by making people think you're a much worse writer than you really are when you've actually fleshed out the chapters

The phone rings, and Kattar rolls his eyes with good-natured frustration.

“Sorry, I’ve gotta take this, it’s my crush,” I say tauntingly, holding out my screen to show him his mother’s caller I.D.

(Mrs. Moon is on the phone and asks them if Kattar’s hospital room TV has the news, he says yes, and she tells them to turn to the local news station. They do and see that Alicia and her exhibit from the day before is on the news. Kattar asks “since when does mom watch the news?” Mrs. Moon hears through the phone and says “I don’t, Jun texted me and told me to pull up the news on my computer.” She comments that Alicia is famous she’s blowing up on the internet at the moment. Alicia is in shock, Mrs. Moon says she has to hang up because she’s getting lunch so she can come over and Alicia says okay a little dumbfounded. The voice on the television mentions that a little digging has found she’s the newest Rainbow Ocean from The Veggera Foundation. Kattar asks her if she’s intending to give it up now because of the mess with…(he can’t even say his name.) She says she doesn’t think so. He tells her not to keep doing it just because she thinks that he wants her too, but she says that she really wants to. She was so proud of her work putting together the exhibit, and giving her speech to all those people. It was one of the most beautiful moments of her life, she doesn’t want to give that up, she wants to keep going. He comments that she looked really beautiful in that pink dress she wore, and she smiles at him a little shyly and flirtatiously and says that she’ll wear it for him again sometime soon, when they go on their first date. And that’s when he asks her, whatever she does, not to tell his mom, and that catches her off guard.

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TheArtistMinty
Apr '24

I'm pretty 'proud' of my recent chapters title. So I'll def. share. It's romance. I've been enjoying writing this one.

I'm gonna write a lot. No one has to read this, lol. I'm just excited to summarise what I've been working on I guess. I really like this so far.

Summary, Alexi have been stuck in a timeloop for almost three years now. Not knowing if he'll ever get out, he tries to fill his days with anything to move along. Mostly reading, playing music, and whatever else he can think of. Unfortunately for the set of characters, the day of the loop they are stuck in happens to be in the middle of a tropical storm. So everyday, it rains, for the last three years of their memories.

Ch. 1 | Ongoing Storm (Cause, yeah)
It sets up the story, and introduces the 'main' conflict. Alexi having far moved from his relationship but unable to end the relationship with his partner. Though initially, he had tried to wait it out until the loop stops. Time keep on passing for him, and she had stayed the same. So he had inevitably grown past her.

Though the loop isn't all terrible. Alexi was mostly a pop artist on YouTell, his foster mother is a soloist and it's a musical family. But he never really got past the basic of violin of just making good sound. Within the loop, he had a lot of time, and not much to do with it. So he 'practised' a lot and often visit his old home to get feedback and advise from his mom. He does that mostly for conversations though, not to get better, that's just extra.

Most of the times, Ava is already asleep, but some reason, she comes downstair to talk to her boyfriend. Which Alexi doesn't really want to talk. Ava sensing something is wrong confronts him, and they break up, again. He explains the loop to her like before. And she declares tomorrow, they'll go get him a CAT scan and everything he needs to make sure everything is alright. Alexi shares he already had all that done before in one of the day of the loop. But she remains persistent.

The day end with her asking him not to give up on them even if everything he's saying is true. He didn't hear what else she has to say, he doesn't really care, it's been too much time since. He knows the relationship is long over. It's just unfortunate that if tomorrow ever does come, that's when Ava is finally able to try to move on, though he already has.

Ch. 2 | Clear Blue Sky (GET IT, CAUSE, IT"S ALWAYS RAINING. WOW I"M CLEVER, JOKE JOKE)

This chapter shows the basic routine Alexi goes through everyday to try to stay sane until he's out of the loop. The feeling of having some control over his life by what he chooses to wear and the fashion sense he picked up. As the title suggests, he wants to see something other than rain today. So he takes a 7 hours drive to the next state over along the coastline to see it. Not bothering to return home for the day as he'll just wake up on the floor of his new home as soon as the time hits.

Anytime a character is introduced in a book, I think it's 'too obvious', and I tried to make it as... not obvious as I can. By introducing another loop character playing a public piano, which Alexi had seen many times before, and the "Melodies fly over his head." I tried to dilute the introduction by getting readers to focus on the aspect of how he perceives everyone else. He doesn't bother to interact with anyone 'cause it had become depressing.

The chapter goes on showing the clear mundane boredom of not having anything 'worthwhile' to do within the loop. A week later, he does stop and listen to the girl playing the public piano, as he had before. This time she's playing Liszt's Love Dream No. 3, which is a bit of a flashy piece on some of the passage. He silently applaud for her afterwards, trying to remember if she had always been that good. He starts to walk away.

But she stops him, and strikes the first conversation. Asking what he thinks of her rendition. He says he doesn't know much about piano, but he recognise the piece cause a friend of his really likes it, that and it's pretty popular as one of Liszt nocturne set,.The girl mentions she had heard him play before and would like to hear him play again, suggesting he should since there's nothing going on right now anyway.

Following her up, he plays a Consolation piece, also Liszt. It's an 'easier' piece, but music isn't about playing fast or flashy. It's about connecting to the music itself and understanding what is being played. These are both romantic pieces, he thinks about his past relationship for the emotions he wants to convey. She applaud for him afterward and asks if he knew the piece. He mentions the name and no. Which she laughs and say, it's no.3 as well.

He had a fun time and mentions he should get going, it was nice to meet her. He walks off again. But she stops him, being persistent, suggesting that she has nothing else to do for the day and wonders if they could spend some time together. He initially thought against it, but she convinces him. After having a fun day, she asks to exchange numbers, which everything will reset tomorrow anyway, so he doesn't care. She asks if she can call him later, or if he would. He says it's alright if she wants to call later.

She does, and they talk about the day and various other nonsense to pass the time. Not knowing how many hours have passed, but she does, noticing the day is close to an end. She asks him to call her tomorrow, to not forget about her. Which he says sure, whatever. The day resets.

The loop begins again, he follows his routine again. Going to his favourite place this time to spend his day, the overexpose skylight library. The piano girl walks up to him and sees him ever so focused on book. She gets his attention and says something like. Didn't think you'd forget me so fast. He asks if he knew her, to which she laughs and talks about the day they had just spent together. Realising he's not totally alone in the loop, he's overwhelmed.

The chapter end with some line like. Her entrance is no less than a lightning bolt out of a clear blue sky.

Ch. 3 | Lightning Bolt (READERS GET IT. haha)

This chapter. I think. is. 'most interesting' and a bit meh. It explains the time before the previous chapter. Introduces two new characters that is the piano girl's friends, and readers get to find out that piano girl isn't. errrrrr.

It starts off with piano girl hanging out with her friends, being excited about how Alexi had listened to her play today, and even waved at her. But he didn't talk to her. Piano girl thinks she's making progress. But her friends is tired of hearing her talk about Alexi, and just wants her to get it over with and talk to him. Piano girl wants him to strike the first conversation though. Her friends think that's a terrible idea and it wont' happen because piano girl have a clear advantage. She knows about the loop.

They remind her yet again, that from Alexi's perspective, he's all alone in the loop so he won't talk to anyone really. If they're going to talk, piano girl will have to be the one to strike the conversation. But piano girl dismisses the idea. Thinking he'll eventually talk to her. She even got way better at piano in the process of trying to get his attention. One of her friend says she should just have some confidence, to which she replies it has nothing to do with confidence. Her other friend adds that it has to do with fantasy. Which piano girl confirms and laughs.

Her two friends grow impatient, and gives her a deadline, otherwise they'll tell Alexi themselves that he's not alone in the loop. Since it's not good for him to think so being stranded from the rest of the group. Piano girl gives in and says she'll talk to him soon, given the 3 days deadline. she has two more tries.

One of her friend mentions it's a bit creepy to go there everyday just to try to get his attention. To which she laughs and say her friend doesn't understand anything. Her friend shares that she definitely don't understand how piano girl can love someone so much and put all that effort in when she barely knows him. Piano girl clarifies that she doesn't love him, she loves the fantasy of being in love with him. and that once they talk, that possible fantasy will be all over, and it'll start to be reality. (OOF, I really like this moment, they do get bored in the loop haha)

Athena901
Apr '24

so my story about a young girl who find her self in a tricky situation and a lost memories, with a help from new friend she will start to put the pieces together but her own story will shatter right after that.
I hope you will enjoy reading it.
please give me your honest opinion.

kyupol
Apr '24

AngHell Dela blackpill...

Prologue: introducing Akala Maya... incel shoots up school but survives... and another incel attempts suicide by jumping off a building.

Chapter 1: Claudita chases Akala and corners her. So far we flashback to Akala's days as a goddess that was worshipped in pre Hispanic Philippines...


2DLenzy
Apr '24

I hope y'all read this and forget about it some time later (it's a lot XD)

Plot points for upcoming "the Red Order" season/chapter? thingy:
(ideally to be published staring this summer, over a year and a half, maybe two if I take breaks.)

-new char/worker fired from TFC, hired to work in gross conditions at the chicken plant
-Aldi meets Luke and Carl awkwardly at the farm, helps out with the chickens
-Chickens freak out because of stranger on their turf. Friar thinks she's a 'new goddess'' or something
-Horace returns, and Dr Fowler - yep they'll be recurring
-reveal another worker who's been at farm, cause I believe in retcon
-New aseel appears and causes trouble.
-another new clucker
-new clucker and aseel have problems
-Friar steps in to save someone's fluff
-Tabuh Rah! Rah! Rah! (that'll make sense later)
-predator appears, things get a little messy
-aseel is now accepted into flock
-some filler BS here? Need funneh to balance
-Kung pao duck appears, Eye of the Tiger plays, Karate Kid ripoff
-training montage!
-fight scenes!
-fight scenes!
-philisophical BS
-fight scenes!
-some human story, cause it ain't bloated enough XD
-someone gets hurt, duck dejected
-something happens, duck returns;
-spoiler
-House of Reds and Red Order officially explored <- might move this up?
-Friar history, Gallus history
-spoiler2
-fight scenes!
-draw names from hat to see who dies... JK
-resolution, end of Red Order season thingy
-phat hiatus
-"The Brown Order" begins in distant future

*The White Order concludes April 20-21, then a break before this all starts. You can sub if you want the announcements (or watch the forums, either works).

I'd give you free corn for subbing, but, uh, the supply is running low.

Leyelle
Apr '24

xd, see i was doing plot points chapter by chapter not book/season by season xd. this is like a lot

2DLenzy
Apr '24

Sorry, I don't know what chapters are for my thing lol XD
I just dumped everything!

sophialyncoleman
Apr '24

Haha! Fun idea OP!
I’ll do the first 5 chapters (but first 3 are available to read now)
Chapter 1
Casey’s First day of school
Panic attack in the car
bathroom incident…
Chapter 2
Casey stands up for someone
Casey’s Almost eaten by the school staff
Chapter 3
A catman breaks into Casey’s house and tells her aunt to go save the world
The guidance counselor, Casey’s aunt Sadie and Casey’s best (only) friend have to fight the prom queen to save Casey’s life
Chapter 4
They’re stuck in the woods together
A vampire monologues
Chapter 5
Panic attack pt 2
Group Panic attack

Leyelle
Apr '24

wow this really does sound like a worst case scenario

Leyelle
Apr '24

(Spoiler Warning!)

This week's chapter plot points. the warning is that it obviously always diverges some between plot point/chapter outline and the chapter itself.

As Alicia is about to leave, she stops and checks her makeup in her hand-held mirror before heading out, because she had been starting to cry, and wants to make sure she hadn’t messed up her makeup. She hears Emelia behind her ask, “her if she’s going out to meet her boyfriend in the wheelchair.” Alicia asks how she knows that, and she comments that she saw him at the award ceremony. And makes a comment along the lines of him basically being out of her league. Alicia comments that he’s not her boyfriend. And Emelia says “well that makes sense.” But Alicia realizes that Kattar wasn’t in a wheelchair during the award ceremony, so how did she know he was in a wheelchair now? And she explains no, she doesn’t have a date, she was just checking her makeup. Emelia seems a little satisfied by that and then comments that there’s a runny bit under her left eye, Alicia jumps a little at that and checks to fix it but there’s nothing there. Emelia has already walked off by then, and that irritates her. She gets into her car a little frustrated and angry, but drives home and goes inside, planning to get to work but then she goes to the fridge commenting that she needs something sweet. Melissa and Kattar both text her to ask how her first day was, as she’s angrily eating a donut. She says it was okay, to them both. Melissa texts her a picture of this dress she got recently, and asks her what she thinks. Alicia says it’s so cute, she tells her she was wearing this pretty bland black dress, and takes a picture. She thinks she sent it to Melissa but is confused because it didn't go through, so she sends it again. Then she gets a text from Kattar, and is shocked and embarrassed to realize she sent it to Kattar instead, who is a rather embarrassed asking “Um…this picture.” “omg, so sorry, i was sending that to a friend. I’ll delete it.” he replies quickly that she doesn’t have to do that, he doesn’t mind. She’s a little suspicious of that and replies “You aren’t blinded by the frumpiness?” “It’s actually a lot better than a lot of your other dresses, though it could use something to dress it up a little, like sash, or some lace.” “I’m wary about sashes around you.” “Fair fair.” there’s a pause, “it’s really a nice dress though. By the way, do you think you’d have time to get dinner tonight?” She’s caught off guard, because she had been planning to work, and think brainstorm some ideas for the workshop classes, but she rationalizes to herself that she can bounce some off of Kattar, and thinking about Emelia’s face when she said she WASN”T going on a date, she decides to say yes, and says she’ll pick him up in half and hour. She goes to the bathroom, and fixes her hair, spritzes on some perfume, and starts arranging her hair, then she looks at her makeup, and gets a little irritated remembering Emelia, she decides to wash all the makeup off, furiously and then dry her face, convincing herself she doesn't want to let that woman get on her nerves.
During this convo he refuses to get rid of the picture after she tells him to delete it, this irritates ehr and she says she’ll just have to hack into his phone and steal it then. He says that she doesn’t know his password. He’s never told ehr, and he knows she isn’t that nosy. “No but i can figure out what it is in like three guesses.” “that’s a bold assumption. Try.” “it’s man in the moon.” “wrong.” “then it’s space cat.” “okay that is freaky. I need a new password.” “it’ll just be like two more guesses. It’s not freaky you just have zero creativity. It’s literally one word different from what the password was on our old cellphone.”
They used to share a cellphone as teens because her aunt couldn’t afford to buy her one. She just had this old flip phone that used to belong to her aunt and had no cellphone plan on it, just cuz you can dial 911 even without a plan. So she and Kattar shared the phone until he considered it their phone. She had the password, xyz. He complained once for her to stop taking selfies and filling up the phone storage, but then another time as she was laying sleepdrunk on his bedroom floor she commented “stop taking pictures of me.” “never” “you complain about me taking selfies but then take a bazillion photos of me yourself.” “That’s just cuz you stink at taking pictures. Here, let’s do one for our screensaver.” he laid down beside her and put his arm around her, which immediately embarrassed her, and she covered her face as he raised his arm to take a selfie of them laying on the floor. He told her to stop covering her face, and to do a piece symbol or something, so she clasped her hands under her chin and did a little bit of a duck face. And she remembers seeing his eyes in the selfie cam, the way they shifted when he saw her make that face, and a slight flush come into his face. (he wanted really badly to turn and kiss her just then, but he didn’t.)

ArdiHel
Apr '24

Chapter 1: Asha kidnaps Fiadh from the Noostower where he is being abused.
Chapter 2: Everyone is evacuating the place, so they try to sneak into a departing train.
Chapter 3: After being kicked out of the train, they have to survive in the snow wastelands against a monster pursuing them.
Chapter 4: Back to safety, Fiadh meets a genie who offers to grant him his deepest wish.
Chapter 5: Riding the final train to destination, they come face to face with an old enemy of Asha.
Chapter 6: Same as before, but the second part of that finale!