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Aug 2019

The art is very cute. Hard to tell about the composition or storytelling aspects from a limited sample, but you're on the right track. Ditto on the lettering.

Give a little more space for the text in that bubble.
Art looks good.
Can't say anything else since I don't know the context of this.

I’d recommend the lettering be centered instead of left aligned.

Okay, really nitpicky on the font, but comic sans looks really (for lack of better words...) cheap and uninteresting. Maybe try italicizing it? I did that for a while before making my own font, and it seemed to alleviate the bland look :slight_smile:

That guy seems to be something like a villian or some body looking por revenge... and mayonnaise.. i want to see it do you have any link?

Nice line quality and colourwork. Everyone's already mentioned the lettering, needs a little work (mind your widows and orphans, words sitting on their lonesome on the bottom of the panel) but I enjoy a good white text black balloon. You're on the right track and it suits the style and lighting. Clever! Panel borders feel nice and organic, which I'm a big fan of despite literally never doing it in my work.

I'd work on two things with it (and be warned it is p i c k y), plane seperation and panel colours to create space, which really fall under the same category. You can create the illusion of space with a few tricks, but here lightening up and simplifying the background can make the space in the back of the panel look more expansive. Right now it looks a little like a greenscreen. If that's the look you're going for, like paper dolls in front of a backdrop (which suits your style and can be really interesting) that's really good! Nailed it! Otherwise maybe thin down your background lines, desaturate/lighten the background colours to make your figures stand out. Overlap also helps - those shadows in the midground I wouldn't cut right before the figure's face, but continue so it looks like they keep going behind them. That'll help it look like a real space, which you're already making with the way they curve in perspective. (I do like the colouring, in general though. Palette choice is lovely and you've got some contrast going on in-panel to separate your background and foreground. I'd avoid white in the background just because as the lightest part it'll naturally draw the eye)

To create more form, I'd also thin down the interior lines on your figure but keep the outline nice and thick. It keeps the cartoon style while letting you create weight to the things you're drawing. It reminds me a lot of lavender towne's work in eyes and palette in a really good way.

I'm also really intrigued about the mayo and definitely want to see more of this, I really like it!