Can I get opinions on my novel so far

[Creatorofimagination]

Read The World of the Awakened Gods | Tapas Web Community

If my novel wasn’t bad I’d appreciate a like and subscribe

[MK-AKA-Morgan]

Bookmarking so I can read through it later, do you want feedback when I read it or do you just want to promote your story- I'll read it either way of course, just wanted to make sure I didn't wanna give you feedback if you didn't want it

[Creatorofimagination]

I’d love feedback thanks

[AliceTuinz]

I started reading your first chapter, and I have a few thoughts.
First, beautiful prose, rich vocabulary, very interesting subject. You start with a great hook - someone is dying and we instantly know something interesting is about to happen, or we won't have a book at all

Now, on to the constructive criticism: This sentence structure ( with all the short sentences) can be a stylistic choice, but it also distracts from the story. When you read it out loud, you will notice that the cadence always comes with a stop, like someone is telling the story out of breath.

I will subscribe to it, and read more so I can give you feedback on the plot as well, but I think you're really talented, just need to find your style ( or adjust it a bit, to make it easier to read)