Here is the review!
-Art-
Your style is constantly changing in the comic, not sure if you settle in a style already or will keep experimenting. I'll comment on the current style use. I like the clean lines, though I see some overlapping in lines here and there. The color are more subdue than in the first which works well as the others felt to saturated. What I am not liking to much is the shadow, a lot of time it looks like smudge colors instead of the shadows, I do like the more solid shadow you use here and there and I think it works best with your current color scheme.
-Writing-
Will again review using the later chapters as I did see improvement in text layout among other things. I would suggest to try make the text a bit bigger. I am reading on a PC so I can read it easily, but in mobile the text can be hard to read. I like the way the talk is in a somewhat crazy aspect, giving them an unique feel and of course makes sense them been assassins and missing a screw in the head most likely!
-Paneling-
Not much to say here, you have nice spacing between them. I'll say it looks a bit weird some panels having outline on top and bottom but not on the sides. Otherwise I think you are doing a good job with the paneling.
-Story-
I never read BL to be honest, but in your case I am glad is not so in your face about this aspect and is more about their jobs as assassin. Most of the cast are insane, but that makes it interesting and stand out a bit from usual 'cool, calm and mysterious' assassins that are more common. Giving it has supernatural aspect to it I am sure thing can and will become more crazy as the story moves along!
Here is my review. I'll try to read as much as possible.
-Art-
Really like your style, it reminds me a lot of Kid's next door with a mix of today's cartoons. It has great bright color, good design. Really like the character design, Honey Bubble's eye are pretty cool. Also like you have variety of characters, great expression and variety of poses. Your background are also good and does give the sense of them moving from place to place.
You also make great use of effect thru out the comic (the flashes, the bubble shield, the sonic wave). You have some really good battle scenes and one can really feel the hits and impact of their actions and attacks!
-Writing and story-
I am combing both since is a bit hard to talk of one without mentioning the other. I am glad you didn't go the prologue route to explain about the two forces and instead slowly lease into it. You made sure to first introduce us to the main character and some of their character traits to give us an idea how they will be in future events. Danny seem weak but he really isn't, just a bit shy but with a strong sense of friendship and loyalty. Danny is the more outgoing happy one but with real care for Danny and knowing to take it easy with him. I ended reading it all, the pacing was perfect, story is intriguing and characters are really fun. The possibility of their power developing and see if their aura can grow will keep me hook.
As for the font, is perfect. I like how you give emphasis to certain words and how you do the 'sound effect' all around!
-Paneling-
You use a single page manga/comic style and it really work, not much I can add. You make great use of inside panel without over using it and I believe you have great spacing between panels!
This thread is amazing! I'm reading through some of the reviews and learning a lot from afar. That being said, it'd be nice if you could review the first chapters of my comic. There isn't much yet, but my friend and I are just concerned about the pacing/art/paneling so far. We tried going for a "storybook" style by incorporating some traditional elements and we'd like to hear if we were successful in that regard...
Here it is!
-Art-
Got to say you have some amazing art. The sketch like line work is really good and the color give a pencil and pastel like quality making it rather unique. It also ties in well with the time period the series seem to take place in. Your proportion are on point and you really give us a nice look of the town using it in a great way for transition scenes.
I normal I leave font talk for the writing part, but I am doing it in art cause it fits more here. I know you selected one for easy reading, but it being so clean and modern clashes a bit with the art style. I think a font like https://www.1001fonts.com/im-fell-english-font.html1 might suit better. Is still easy to read, but adds a bit of imperfection (scribble like) that goes well with the sketch like art. This is a personal opinion of course, just always feel font are really important to go along with the art.
Is just for the text in speech bubble, the one use for effect fit perfectly.
Outside of the font your art is on point, the style is unique in itself, animal, town and people are all done in a great way and you have really good face expressions. As for the storybook, I do believe you nail that feeling with the art. The art doesn't give it a comic like feel even though is format like that, it feel like pages you normally go throw when reading a drawn storybook.
-Writing-
I like that you use different speech pattern on character and give 'accent' to some, make it feel like a more natural speech. I like the amount of text use, it make it easy to read and follow! The prologue is perfect in that it gives a bit of info but leave a ton of mystery and intrigue to keep one hook instead of being an info dump.
I also couldn't find find any typo or error from my reading.
-Paneling-
I can tell you plan for the vertical format from the start and achieve a great method. The panel all flow nicely and you put them in good position moving down guiding the eyes where to go which is important. Great use of black also for clearly tense moment (the crack forming and guy having the scare of his life). Keep up this vertical comic method as is working really well.
-Story-
You just started so not much I can see here, but I'll say you have a nice start in peaking one curiosity on the kid on the tree and what it means so as far as hook goes for the start of a story you did a great job!
Hope this help and you have a really good comic with amazing art!
I'm down if you can review my comic, it's short and I made some very recent improvements to the latest pages. Also the the first few pages are like years old and I didn't feel like completely redoing them, although if you think that's a good idea, I'll consider doing so
16 days later
On the color subject, I'd really like to put color in my comic, it's just that I'm not fast enough yet and I don't have the time. But maybe sometime in the future...3 months later
Hello. I would like to get a review, if you still doing them, please.
I know beforehand that my banes are human anatomy, text translation and speed of the updates. =D
2 months later
Just released a new episode! https://tapas.io/episode/132249722
https://tapas.io/series/Heylel1 here's mine ^^
1 month later
I'd really love to hear your opinions about my webcomic, yours would be the first review I ever had!
16 days later
Here's my comic. It's still quite short so there's not much to review but I'll return the favor to anyone that wants to give it a go. It's a sci-fi psychological thriller.
1 month later
Hi I just recently started my ongoing comic "Help I got reborn as a baby bird! Don't eat me!", a short comedy/skit on the cute side of comedy. I would love to know what you think. Any feedback would be highly appreciated! Thank you.
9 months later
5 months later
i would like to know if you could look over by comic the art gets better each chapter thanks for your help
Is it okay if I dropped my novel here, take a look​
it's something like that
â—Ź Name: Age of Magic
â—Ź Genre: Fantasy, Action, Mystery, Magic
â—Ź Summary:
500 years ago, people believed that a great earthquake divided a huge continent into three ones . These three lived in peace until the day when a village got destroyed leaving one survivor. A boy named Leo, but little did he know of the adventure that awaited him.
â—Ź Why should you read it ?
Hmmm, If you like elves and demons or dragons, it's gonna be here, if you wanna see the journey of boy who lost everything and wants to get stronger in order to get his revenge, it's also gonna be here, if you like magical stuff, and how it works ( There're available episodes that explain magic how it works " The origin of magic " check them out if you wanna know how, and let me know ur opinion about it )
â—Ź Hopefully you check it out
Y2F
