Constructive Feedback Exchange... with a TWIST!

[Cielle]

thanks for your feedback @skatuya! I will try to fix the lettering, or at the very least try to make it more legible from here on out ^.^

and Hello, @MechanicalPenguin! I read through your story, and it's really intriguing! I like the story a lot; it seems like it's headed in a cool direction. I like your use of animation; it's very unique and eye-catching. I especially liked the animation of the "pets" transforming from humans (? I think they're human? human-shaped) into animals. Overall, I think you're going in a good direction.

for constructive feedback, my biggest suggestion is the speech bubbles. Sometimes (not always) it was a little confusing to figure out what order they were supposed to be read in. It seems like the clarity has increased in some of the more recent pages, so perhaps it is a moot point. My other suggestion has to do with the animations. I really like them and they add a lot to the story, but sometimes they go too quickly and it's hard to figure out what has happened (for example, the scene where Kiev attacks Nikolai. I had a hard time with that one...it might just be me, though).

Overall, your comic is really cool and I thoroughly enjoyed it. You have improved over time, and I think NIK is headed in a wonderful direction. I look forward to reading more!

My comic is Reus. There's only a few pages up at this point, but more pages are on the way soon! I would appreciate any feedback ^.^

[Doodlescrub]

Thank you for your honest opinion MechanicalPenguin! I'll remember to try and make the flow of my comics easier to understand haha 😅

[UltHamBro]

Thank you very much! The blue tones idea has proved successful, and I do plan of swapping it in the future if the mood of the scene varies. I'm also proud of the character of how Grandpa has turned out. Regarding cheating: yes, it's expected, allowed, encouraged and completely normal. The bad part is when you're a bad cheater and get caught

After reading the criticism, I've gone back to my script and rewritten a few lines in future pages so the story is easier to understand (for example, the cheating part is a plot point which wasn't really clear in the first version: it'll be clearer thanks to you ). Don't worry about the games: part of the original idea was to include games that few people know.

I have to work on the translation though. I decided to make the comic bilingual once I had the entire script in Spanish, and I've rewritten a few lines for the English version. However, the Spanish version is a lot more colloquial, and I find it hard to convey the same feeling to the English one.

Long story short, thank you very much for your criticism!

[stormwhiskers]

Hi @Cielle

I like your prologue! It looks like you've set this up to be a pretty awesome epic and I really like that your main character at the moment is an older woman. We definitely don't see enough of that!

What you're doing well: I like that you're varying your shots and not avoiding backgrounds. It really allows you to set your scenes and the mood for each page well.

What you could improve on: Since someone has already commented on your lettering, I'll focus on the speech bubbles themselves. Sometimes your lettering bumps up against the edge of the bubbles which makes it harder to read. The tails of your speech and thought bubbles also don't always originate from the mouths or heads of the speakers, which makes conversations harder to follow. This infographic might help you http://beyondthebunker.com/2012/06/10/10-mistakes-made-by-amateur-letterers/

Overall though, it looks like a solid start to your comic. Great job!

My comic is Teacup Tales

[keii4ii]

Tapastic is refusing to let me post this. Hoping it'll go through this time

I'm impressed by the variety of art styles AND story types present in your comic, @stormwhiskers. So far, every story has looked and felt totally different from each other, and it's mind-boggling to imagine what you might bring to the table with the next episode. Meetings is probably the closest thing to the "standard" fare (whatever it is); then there's The Boy, B&W with clean yet stark lines plus just the right amount of one other color. The Old Tree is probably my favorite so far in terms of art style. Each style is executed well and fits the story very well.

One thing that I think could be improved is the structure of each story. None of the three stories so far feel complete (perhaps with the exception of The Boy), and not because they're short. It's because they don't follow the dramatic structure of a narrative. Meetings, for instance, has a wonderful beginning and buildup. When the merman noticed the shadow and decided to check out the seal, it made me excited for what might happen when they meet. Then it just ended? I was expecting a climax and a denouement to follow, but that didn't happen.

Of course, not every story has to follow conventions (such as the narrative structure) down to the T, and maybe it's not your goal to create short stories that feel complete. But even if you want to make more open-ended shorts, providing a clearer climax with each story at least would make them more powerful IMO.

Hope that helps!

For the next person: my comic is Heart of Keol. Feel free to point out more than one flaw if you must, haha! XD

[magmi]

@MechanicalPenguin

Thank you for feedback Now I noticed that they really don't fit. I changed them on the latest page

@keii4ii
Okay, I hope it won't be too short but here it is: I absolutely love your artwork. Beautiful coloring, backgrounds, aaaahhh, gorgeous! Story is pretty interesting, and engaging. Not too much text/dialogue on pages, which is really good. I often get bored when it's too much to read, heheh.
I wanted to find something for you to improve, but it's really hard, haha. I guess the only thing that I was disturbed by was the main character double chin, but it's probably just me xD
Subscribed and gonna read more!

Here's mine: Dragnarok

[stormwhiskers]

@keii4ii

Thank you so much for the feedback! I'll definitely focus on rounding out the stories better, to give them less ambiguous endings!

[Icelug]

@Magmi

What can I say about Dragnarok? I love dragons, I have two dragon tatoos and I was born in the Chinese year of the Dragon.
I loved everything, Every single page is full of life. I specially love the colors. Page 17 is my favourite, I can almost feel the cold of the mountains and the warmth of the fire.
The design of the dragons is perfect, and the whole prologue is very well set . Seems this is going to lead to some epicness.
With only 30 pages there's not much to say about the main story or the characters. Aside from their names and telling who is good and who is bad, there's still much to be shown to us.
Sorry to say that, but I can't give any constructive suggestions as it's already perfect the way it is. Keep the great job, I'll definetly keep watching.

Question: Does the name Dragnarok has something to do with Dragons + Ragnarok?

And here goes mine: Mnemosine

[rollo75]

@Icelug

In Greek mythology, Mnemosyne was the daughter of Uranus and Gaia and was the mother of the nine muses - she was the personification of memory.
So as I read this, I'm expecting a story which lives in the realm of memory and/or dreams.
It does what it says on the tin!

As far as tempo, spacing; timing goes, this story works well. The opening Chapter builds a nice premise for the story and the world is sufficiently build so that it's fit together nicely. It's even got clutter in it, which makes it more believable.
Really, I think that this is print quality and it would not look out of place in a bookstore at all. It's complete in its execution.

About the only flaw I can find is that some of the chapters are a wee bit short. Apart from that - it's brill'

And Now... Hack it to bits - I'm as hard as nails.

This Is Douglas:
http://tapastic.com/series/ThisIsDouglas

[EbonyKaze]

I don't feel I'm qualified to give a critique,but I can tell you what I think as someone who enjoyed it!

I like the Ink work a lot,It really defines the backgrounds which are detailed and elaborate.The characters personalities are well portrayed,there relatable and funny.I also like the continuity between stories,like Gary's relationship and the cat food company.

The little things I found troubling,however,were sometimes it was hard to understand some of the panels,mainly during the soccer matches and when they entered the closet,without looking it over various times,and although the dialog gives a good feel of the characters,the panel placement kinda makes it feel like too much to take in,I felt It kind of outstretched the last chapter a little.

Other than that,great comic! It was a lot of fun to read!:)

Here's my comic:The Jade Heart
Any feedback would be apreciated.

[KreativeConfusion]

I think you have a really cute and very unique style going on! It can really set you apart from others as long as you stay consistent with it! (Not saying you aren't consistent, I just see some people really change styles sometimes when learned and experimenting, no saying you shouldn't do that either! Jut remember readers like consistency (I should be one to talk haha)

However I think you should work on your word bubbles a bit more. Remember, less is more! Your pages look really cluttered with to many word bubbles and that can make it look a little disorganized. I also noticed sometimes your word bubbles overlap other bubbles, that's something you shouldn't do unless you plan to have it mean sometimes. Such as one character talking over another character.

Aside from that I wish you luck with your comic!

My comic is Tipping Point I'm always open to critique and I'm willing to hear anything about it!

[EbonyKaze]

Thanks for the feedback,I see what you mean I often feud with myself about how much I should write,I'll keep working on it thanks!:)

[Momo]

Hi @kpalmarin

I really like tipping point!!! The coloring/shading is really nice! I really like that you don't explain things right from the beginning. It leaves curios about the situation and what's happening, so I want to read more! The story line seems intriguing and unique, I also really like dalla's character design! Drawing a seperate human-like lifeform can be really hard but you pulled it off really well! Dalla is cute and lovable! I love his personality! I do however, think you should use more effects like the one you used in the last panel on page 4! It really kinda 'sets the mood' so to say!!! I hope this was ok!

My comic is Magical Anime Reika! :3

[Zanreo]

@Momo

Critique: I guess just some general art improvement and practise? Anatomy ect. Characters sometimes look a bit "off-model". Also, sometimes the text is a bit small and hard to read. Especially on the first page, a few words there were really hard to make out. In addition, you might want to make the characters "stand out" a bit more against the background (give characters slightly thicker lines, for example) And one small detail - in the second page, the speech bubble looks like it's coming from the "poof" cloud when I'm assuming it's Reika saying it (always make sure the bubble tails point the right way!)

Positive: While there's not a lot up there yet, I imagine this could be a fun story! Nicely paced start that introduces the main characters and starts off her adventure! Also, love those little characters and creatures in the second page (pineapple with sunglasses? Nice :D) Fun details like that are a nice touch and seem to fit the mood, so keep that up!

My comic is Consolers, the comic about game companies!

[hierogriff]

@Zanreo

Critique: I'd suggest practising anatomy. Study the shapes and proportions of the arms in particular, and how the torso's movement can add to the body language! Also, your necks are a little fat. Keep trying, and STUDY FROM LIFE. Looks like you're trying to emulate manga artists, and there's nothing wrong with having an anime style at all! But if you're copying other artists' drawings, it can stop you from thinking about how the shapes relate to three-dimensional objects, and you can get simple things wrong. Things like fat necks. But don't worry, this is stuff you can learn!

Positive: It looks like you pick your colours carefully, I especially like the colour scheme in the Valve GDC comic. The jokes are well thought out too!

My comic is Outside the Box, a mystery/comedy.

[susanbehrends21]

Critique: I think you your fonts are a good size but could vary a bit more (this is based off of only a few pages)
Positive: I like the dialogue and the way each character is distinct and has different a style (the way they dress/talk)

Mine is a realistic, potentially romantic comic.

http://tapastic.com/series/39-Days-of-Summer

[abigailkbacilla]

Constructive Compliment: The grayscale really helps draw in the atmosphere, the writing is pretty good and the dandelions and typewriter were drawn well and blended in with the tone of the story.

Constructive Suggestion: I would practice on your anatomy, if your comic is going to be realistic. Also it was hard for me to read some of the text (e.g. the text in the typewriter of your first 3 panels, it was too small).

My comic, Commander Princess Maisie Be honest!

[danburnettjob]

Keii4ii Your art style is gorgeous, my one critique would be about your panelling. I think that your story would flow better if you placed more frames beside each other.

My name is Daniel and I have a comic and youtube channel called Dan Yells, where I rant about whatever comes to my twisted mind (most recently what would happen if the Star Trek teleporter bluescreened half way through beaming someone...its not pretty #4: We need some star tech support)

LINKS:
Comic: danisyelling.tumblr.com

[wander_creature]

@danburnettjob, I like your comic! The brand of humor is great, and definitely something people want to see more of. Definitely keep it up. Constructive criticism: Pressure sensitivity. It could benefit you tremendously.

Alright, peeps. Outer Spaces. Inspirational/positive, vaguely sci-fi comic with space llamas and lost creatures. Take a shot!

[nelmathyria]

@wander_creature Your comic is really cool! I like the colors and the composition, it's all really nice to look at and has a nice flow. I would say you should try to incorporate more colors, but the ones you're using look really lovely.

For constructive criticism, you might want to try speech bubbles around the dialogue, to help it stand out from the background more and to differentiate it from the narration. They don't have to be white with black outlines or anything; I think a solid colored bubble that stands out from the background just a little bit could look really nice. Also, do you save your image files as jpgs? If so, you might want to try pngs. I can see a little bit of...compression, I think is the word for it? That sort of fuzzy, pixel-y look. Png files have a much sharper look, so it might be worth trying.

My comic is Heroic Shenanigans, and it follows the adventures of some kids at superhero summer camp. Its third chapter just started!