English is my native --and I have formal, higher-education in it. It's a hard language. So...pfffft.
I have ADHD, which means my writing jumps around and focuses on little things, and reads like a fever dream. It also meant that I struggled to read books --which meant that my storytelling consumption was visual. So, I also write like it.
I have learned that not all criticism is good criticism. I was working on my formal novel manuscript and sending it to someone who I thought would help me--and their comments, while trying to be kind, were cruel and at times disgusting. (Like, how about you don't sexualize my character like that.) They didn't help me, they tore me down, so badly, that I stopped writing. Full stop.
That's not how it's supposed to work.
So, (I lost my train of thought) it's just noise. You nod your head 'mmkay' and then you find people you trust to help you, not tear you down.
The fact is, you are writing your story in a different language and posting it on the internet without a professional editor. Like, dude, that's massive and impressive as hell.
Don't let the muggles get you down. You're magical. Keep on being you.
If you ever want help --please ask. I do not mind, and as far as I know of this thread, which is the nicest f--ing place, we got your back.