Does this sound catching:
Blurb: Joseph uncover secrets while trying to find the town’s serial killer.
Seventeen year old Joseph Ronchetto’s life is turned upside when his childhood friend, Marcello Watson is found brutally murdered in his own home. The murder then leads to a series of similar murders throughout Wood Maple. Joseph must try and find out the mystery slayer before he is the next target. On his journey, he uncovers many secrets about his late friend. What other secrets are laying beneath the surface?
This is just a draft for an idea.
I would suggest taking out the first sentence. It is generic and doesn't tell me anything about Joseph, secrets or murders. The last two sentences also seem generic without tellling me, again, why 17 yo is uniquely qualified for investigative work (he has clairvoyance? is very smart? or?) or the kind of dreadfull secrest that lead to the murder spree. Is there a suicide pact? Cult? Is it supernatural war? Mafia is moving onto the new territory?
The blurb doesn't need to hide things, it needs to entice people to buy-in. If it is sufficiently intriguing, people would want to get more. Otherwise it's like buying a cat inside a bag, you don't know what you are paying for, even though you may hear a mew.
A incredibly bad habit I have left over from my early internet fanfiction days is that I start a story, write a few hundred words, then repeat. Everything gets finished eventually but I end up with 50+ stories. I have the same issue here, lol. I post as I write and thankfully most of my readers don’t seem to mind the sometimes insanely short updates. Although I am thinking of posting a second edition of each story with the chapters properly put together. I did it with Dragon Knight and that is being received pretty well.
Whatever works, and if you have the genuine readers, you can do whatever you want in terms of length! That’s the beauty of the online fiction
I have been working my way through the second draft of the Lone Werewolf, including the new chapter. So far, 11 chapters are updated, and will continue working on it. I want a stronger soulmate vibe in the chapter I am on rn. So will need to work on that.
It gives me a lot of Riverdale vibes and reminds me of a story I read on Wattpad long ago. Confessions About Colton. Which I really loved. Adding some more details to your blurb would help a lot, as things are quite vague this way. I'd also suggest a better opening line for the blurb to catch the reader's attention; something that really hooks them in. This is just a suggestion, but maybe start off with the killer or Marcello's brutal murder?
There's a serial killer in Wood Maple and Joseph Ronchetto plans to catch him.
The teenager's life is turned upside down when his childhood friend is found brutally murdered in his own home. Consumed with grief and anger, he sets out to find the culprit. (Something to add a little more emotion behind his friend's murder would help a lot here) I'll leave the rest to you, as it's your story and you can always tweak my suggestions if you'd like.
Gosh, what a crazy week so far. Work is busy, writing is busy...
On the upside, I now have a 500 word synopsis for the Lone Werewolf, and am making a steady progress in the revisions. Alas, to apply for the mentorship with it in May, I will have to take it down from Tapas. I am sad, but well, it finished posting, so it doesn't get much reads per day, so maybe it's not a big deal. Maybe it's the right strategy, get a feel for how the story is recieved while posting, then just keep the story on the Wattpad as the main site for all my stories.
I have to ask, what is the point of the mentorship program? I looked into it and it's just to have another author go chapter by chapter through your book to prep for the Watty's? Yes? (The Watty's themselves I don't understand either.) I've found other sites that will give you decent feedback in exchange for you reading other people's work.
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Hello everyone! It's been awhile!
I hope you're all doing well --it seems like you are!
I'm almost at 170k words. Honestly, stress from IRL kind of blocked me for over a month, but good things seem to be on their way, so hopefully I can keep churning out.
Was making revisions but stopped for a moment, because I realized what I actually wanted my style to be, and so now I have to go back and revise EVERYTHING. I'm excited though!
I also went into a hyperfocus one day and attempted to learn how to script, and I scripted the first episode of my book as if it were a show.
Anyway, nothing but love here and
The sweet deal are the workshops. Basically you get 2 rounds of feedback on your 1st chapter (character voice), 500 words summary, Blurb and Logline/pitch. It's worth a LOT, particulary on the 500 words. In my experience, 500 words abslutely have to be read by someone else to help only get the main story and take out everything that only a writer can understand.
If you get a mentorship, you get a beta-read from a popular writer, so that's worth even more to me, because I struggle with writing books that appeal to others.
Found these simple notes on self-editing, since that’s all I am doing atm.
https://s3.amazonaws.com/writers-bootcamp/pdfs/10_Novel+Writing+Bootcamp_Editing.pdf3