Do You Need Feedback/ Edits?

[diestreve319]

Hello, deedee,

Thank you so much for doing this.

I have just been back from posting novels on Tapas.

Can I have feedback on all three? ️ Detailed line edits Big-picture thoughts (pacing, plot, characters) General impressions/encouragement

And I would also love to know what do you think about the blurbs as well for both novels.

I have just posted a short teaser and a short prologue of my two novels. And can I asked again for your feedback once I have posted more chapters? If that's okay with you.

Here they are:

Read Syllable of the Heart | Tapas Web Community

Read There, At Every Firework | Tapas Web Community

[ash317]

Read The Heir Of Shadows :: The whispers begin: Whispers in the hall | Tapas...

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idk if it's good but yea, i hope you'll like it!

[adamjtitus1]

Read Life Core | Tapas Web Community

[LivvyLeopard]

@deedee Thank you so much for your feedback I will take these words to heart and consideration. I will do my best to make every chapter as great and engaging as I can make it. I’m glad you enjoyed it. Don’t forget to leave likes and a sub if you do.

[MK-AKA-Morgan]

I'm not sure if you're still open to giving feedback, but I was wondering if you'd be willing to read through my comics sketched pages rather than what I have on Tapas since I only have a few pages up right now. They're in PDF so I can't share them here, but if you're open to talking on Discord my username is mkakamorgan

[deedee]

I didn't read some of the more mature chapters but from what I did read I, the relationship feels authentic, full of vulnerability and tension, and the pacing makes me want to keep reading. You’re not rushing anything, you’re letting the bond build naturally, and that’s one of the strongest parts of the writing.

A few small edits (clearer dialogue breaks, more sensory grounding, showing emotions instead of telling) would instantly make scenes more immersive. You already have the emotional core, these tweaks would let it shine even more.

What I admire most is how the characters feel human. Their awkwardness, longing, and hesitation are relatable, and it’s easy to root for them. I’d encourage you to lean into those small, quiet beats just as much as the big romantic ones. Those little moments often stay with readers the longest but I also love a slow burn.

I can definitely see this story carrying momentum through all 17+ chapters, especially if you keep weaving in external pressures and sharpening the supporting cast. You’ve built a strong, emotional backbone; now it’s about layering tension and variety on top of it.

[deedee]

I am always open to giving feedback!

[deedee]

Even from just the prologue and bits beyond, I feel pulled into your world. There’s a quiet magic (pun intended) in how your prose lingers, how tension builds gradually, and how ordinary life and mystical forces mingle.

What excites me most is watching Amy’s journey unfold, discovering her power, wrestling with secrecy, leaning on or clashing with others, and facing the cost of magic. You’ve given us a beautiful foundation. If you continue layering in stakes (emotional, interpersonal, cosmic) and letting characters deepen, this can become something truly memorable.

Keep doing what you’re doing! The story you’ve started has the weight and the promise to carry readers all the way through those later chapters and leave them thinking, breathing, feeling. Overall Impression, loved it so far!

[kris_starlight]

Thank you, this is really helpful! It tracks with other feedback I recently received. I also removed the mature flags since I was being overly conservative (this is my first time posting on Tapas, so I took a cautious approach).

I'm glad the characters and their relationships feel authentic, as creating the moments they share together is one of the main reasons I started writing. It's Ravik's journey, but I want his world to be filled with dimension and color.

I appreciate your time and insight in helping me refine my story ️

[Sylverixxxxx]

Hi, I would also love a review if possible. It's my first time writing... I'm sure i make many mistakes along the way. I'm open to change, its just that sometimes its hard to notice ur mistakes since you dont know better.
Thank you in advance if you take time to read my story! ( The cover is form Canva btw, I know it looks AI but I already cleared it out with tapas)

Read My Dreams of You | Tapas Web Community

[smilingworg]

Thank you so much! you've completely made my day

Let me know if you have a story posted that you'd like me to take a look at

[kritikasingh654kk]

Hey !
I’m currently writing a realistic YA story based on personal experiences — it’s emotional, dramatic, and messy in all the right ways.

It’s a mix of friendship, heartbreak, self-discovery, and growing up — with moments that feel almost too real because, well, they kind of are.
I’d love your honest feedback — on the writing, pacing, emotions, or even the characters (especially the main duo ).

Your thoughts will really help me improve and process this story, which means a lot to me.

If you do read, please let me know what hit hardest or what you’d like to see more of!
Please read from chapter 8 to skip the first crush part.

Check out Lost in Chapters on Tapas. https://tapas.io/series/Lost-in-chapterss

[deedee]

No problem!! I am happy to help! I have a story posted if you want to check it out, if not that is okay as well!

Read The American Stuck In Korea :: Hello Seoul | Tapas Community

[Aero]

I don't really need feedback (it would be appreciated but not necessary) but I would love some encouragement! It's been...rough lately

Read Murder in the Rearview | Tapas Web Community

If this isn't your taste, I have 4 other works if you'd rather do them! I just put this one cause I feel like it doesn't get the love it deserves just because of the theme

[deedee]

I really love that Leoli’s mischievous side isn’t just for comic relief , it feels integral, a part of how she interacts with forces bigger than her. The idea that demigods reincarnate, that they must serve gods and mortals, and that even routine exorcisms hide hidden threads, that all feels ripe for storytelling. The foreword’s tone (“forgotten memories,” “scars of the world”) got me in my feels. The kind of opening that suggests there’s beauty, pain, and mystery ahead. The world sucks you in. You don’t just read the divine politics; you want to figure them out, to see how the characters navigate them.

Didn't read through all 120 Chapters but got through a few of them and overall loved the way you built the characters out and the world. Thanks for letting me read!

[deedee]

I’m really enjoying Fantasia so far, the concept of a reborn Earth shaped by alien meteorites is such a creative and captivating idea. I'm not sure I've read anything like this so it feels original. The world feels alive, mysterious, and full of possibility. I especially love the dynamic between Danaël and Dod; their friendship adds warmth and humor that balance out the danger and wonder of their journey. It’s easy to connect with them, and the writing makes it feel like I’m exploring this strange, beautiful world right beside them.

If I could suggest anything, it would be to add just a little more sensory detail to help readers feel the world: the sounds, the textures, the atmosphere of the Symbiotic Era. Also, sprinkling in a few small hints about Danaël and Dod’s origins early on could make readers even more curious about what’s to come. But honestly, the pacing, tone, and imagination already make this story stand out. It’s the kind of adventure that keeps you reading late into the night and makes you excited to see what’s waiting in the next chapter.

[Zhengo]

Thanks for the feedback!

[Dadoche]

Wow thank you so much for the feedback it is very helpful !!

[EgoTheStar]

Hello Deedee,

I would love a feedback (also would like to know what you think about my cover and resume if possible!), but please don't feel "obligated" if you don't like urban fantasy or the general theme :))

It's very nice of you to do that btw !

Akrasia
Romy Reed is just a master student with a dubious past seeking some quick cash, but when she starts developing strange side effects after an experiment and a creature tries to murder her, she knows there's only two solutions : discovering what she really is... or die trying.

Read Akrasia - Romy Reed series | Tapas Web Community

[deedee]

I’ve made it through the first 22 episodes so far, and wow. This story really keeps me hooked! You’ve built something that feels dark, layered, and surprisingly human beneath all the chaos. The mix of tension, emotion, and humor is great, I honestly wasn’t expecting to laugh as much as I did.

“Yes… he turned 30 at 18…” absolutely had me cracking up . The shooter really did look 30, but that line made my day. The touch of comedy worked perfectly and gave the story some balance between the heavier moments.

What really stood out to me was how you touch on mental health. That’s such a major issue in society and something people still don’t talk about enough. I love that you weave it in here, it adds depth and makes the story hit harder.

And that 4th wall break? Lowkey had me CACKLING. I was so wrapped up in the story I forgot you’d even asked for feedback, that moment pulled me out in the best possible way. The humor, meta awareness, and self-reflection all blend in such a unique style that makes this comic stand out.

You’ve definitely kept my attention and earned yourself a subscriber! Thanks for letting me read! It’s one of those stories that feels heavy and funny at the same time, and I can’t wait to see where the next chapters go.