Do you understand what's going on?

[uhokhjol]

Hello! Friends, I really need someone to look my comic through and decide whether the plot is comprehensive or not. I'm not really sure about my writing skills and dunno if my readers understand the plot line and what's actually going on. Aand updates once a week don't really contribute to it lol
I will be glad to receive any other critique

[elyss]

It's very pleasant to look it. It gives me innocent but mischievous vibes.

I wouldn't say there's a plot yet, but you've built the world up and that's perfectly fine for one chapter.

[writercynknapp]

OK, I subscribed and voted. Clearly a good comic.

Any thoughts on mine? https://tapas.io/series/Probably-Not-Can

[uhokhjol]

thank you for the feedback!

[Temteno]

Hello uhokhjol,
I checked out your comic and I adore your art! It reminds me of the art I see in old storybooks and, as elyss said, gives the innocent but mischievous air. I'm glad I stumbled across this comic - I will definitely follow where you take it.

I wouldn't say your comic doesn't have a comprehensive plot. I think it's pretty clear what is going on and what the comic will promise with its plot. The dialogue feels little jarring at some points though (for ex. "Manu, you knew that I'm gonna like it!", "You're welcome, dear lady") as it doesn't make sense sometimes (Mathilda's part sounded more like an statement than compliment while Manu's dialogue gives an impression that it was a compliment to him). It's not anything major though, just something to keep an eye on.

I would also recommend to keep an eye on the pacing. For now it is good but the comic can easily move too quickly if you don't keep an eye on it. Other than that, I don't think there is any problem going on with the plot itself.

Good luck to your comic-making journey!

[uhokhjol]

honestly, can't give you any advice on the style or plot, but one thing that will improve understanding is different font (maybe not so thick, to my opinion), and thinner lines of speech bubbles - so they wouldn't distract from the text. You can use smaller font size and leave more space between it and speech bubble. It will look more neat.

[uhokhjol]

Thank you for such detailed answer!
I will consider what you said, ugh, this thing with dialogues
Thank you again and good luck to you too! (subscribed to your comic, you've got really great style!)

[Temteno]

No problem at all - I'm just very thankful for your kind words! I'm a novice in the comic making world myself and I have problems with the pacing and dialogue so I can feel your pain. Practice makes better as is said though!

[unknown_user]

I think that it's about very-very-very short girl, who likes to walk along flowers and to make weird beautiful potions. And one day her uncle was replaced with a weird guy.
LOL. That's all I can say for now
Ah, no, I forgot one more thing: I liked this comics very much and will be waiting for the next update to see what'll happen. It's cute in the GOOD sense (rare case)!

[uhokhjol]

haha, thank you very much!
Whew, I'm happy that the plot is ok, you got everything right