Feedback for Dessert Dress Up (webcomic)

[litcnwriter2018]

= =" I wonder how can it get more notices...because the format is wrong?

[L_M_S]

Quick suggestion on getting feedback: You will get more replies if you link to the comic, as it makes finding it easier and removes any chance of confusion should someone else have a similar name. I believe this is your comic?

Your comic has only been up a few hours, so only a handful of people interested in your genre have come across it. Views are acquired over weeks, not hours, so don't sweat it if they don't start piling up immediately. Unfortunately, I don't have the experience required to critique your comic myself, but perhaps someone else here can be more helpful in that regard.

[Rhonder]

One thing to be mindful of is spelling/grammar. There's nothing too bad, but some instances in this update:

"Take a deep breath"

"The air's scent is the same as 97% dark chocolate"

Other than that, I like the kind of poem-like feel to the episode's story the mental imagery is relaxing. The only thing I might do is vary the background from page to page. At the moment it's just the same cake-looking background every time. Adding some simple visuals to help emphasize the feeling that each page is describing could help amplify that!

The final drawing at the bottom is super cute

Best of luck, and congrats on your launch!

[litcnwriter2018]

So how can i correct the two mistakes?

[litcnwriter2018]

lol ... i can check grammar online