I mean, you can't please every single people. Each and every one of them have their own tastes, and if you think that this is just how you want your story to be, I say go ahead; continue.
I'm not really sure what you meant by 'society has become far too censored', but the mature content mark is used ti mark those supposedly censored scenes?
I'm still not really sure about how the story is going to play out, but you can work on the transition between the scenes!
It looks kind of choppy and breaks the atmosphere when you just move to the next location without explanation on what's happening in between. For example, you can draw Marius beating and tying up Margaret before it transitions to red head's place, and the red head drinking a cup of tea or something, as Marius suddenly appears and disturbing her tea time.
I hope that helped!
