first off, congrats on launching your comic!! thats a really exciting moment, and youre off to a super solid start
some thoughts while i was scrolling through:
- why do you have such massive margins around your pages? even if this is a stylistic choice / something to make printing easier in the future, id consider mixing it up with some panels that extend out to the bleed - especially your establishing shots, they look great as bleeds
- your text is a bit small to easily read on my laptop screen. on a phone people can zoom in, but theyre also looking at a far smaller screen - id recommend bumping it up a little, and making the black bubbles a little more opaque to increase contrast and keep things clear
- this purple palette is really rich and distinctive, it fills your comic with life
- that said, your panels are often quite murky, with key details being lost in the dark. id recommend looking into values, contrast, and composition to make stuff thats clearer and more striking
- rule of thumb: dont put more than 20 words in a balloon, or 20 balloons on a page. thats the max where people get overwhelmed and start skimming over your stuff.
- in round bubbles, youll want to format your text in a diamond, smallest line at top and bottom, biggest in the middle - like so:
this makes it easier to fit it into a bubble, so it takes up less space and feels nice and natural
- whats the reading order here?
you want to make sure that the reading order of the panels is clear, and the foremost way to do that is with panel placement; usually panels go side to side on a row, varying little in height on a line. however, stacking panels is also a popular method, especially in manga. when you want panels to be read in a stacked order, however, you need to make that clear. i recommend having a wider gutter between rows or stacks of panels to signify what panels are grouped together, and also make the drawing in the bottom left panel throw the readers eye back up to the top for the next panel.
besides these little pointers, youve got a really distinct atmosphere going and your comic has buckets of style - that sense of style will take you far. good luck!