Finally making the leap! Would love some feedback on the storyboard!

[nixxusnibelheim]

Hello everyone. I decided to work on my comic for real and keep working on it 'til it's done.
I will use this thread to update you all and hopefully I can make the project better with your inputs!

Right now I only have the first two scenes storyboarded, it's rough but hopefully, it's clear enough!
I'm not looking for specific feedbacks so good or bad, I would like to hear! Thank you

Episode 1, part 1/5: https://imgur.com/a/0vvIk6T

A bit of context, Off-Grid is a cyberpunk horror webtoon. I'm trying to offer a cinematic experience through this format. Taking inspiration from movies, anime/manga and videogames I love such as Akira, Drive, Blade Runner (1&2), Perfect Blue, Yakuza, Ruiner, Evangelion...

[rosenw_ltz]

Whoa! Just from reading these two scenes, I'm already intrigued. I like that you got right into the action without infodumping, which is important to get readers hooked right away. I looked at them on mobile and desktop and your font is nice and legible, and the spacing is very good.

I noticed you have a lot of establishing shots, which isn't a bad thing at all but you may have to draw a lot of backgrounds! I ended up combining a lot of my dialogue-less panels and replacing small bgs with flats/gradients, but of course this all depends on the creator and their comic style.

Your art is really polished and I think this'll be big when it releases

[nixxusnibelheim]

Thank you for your time, I appreciate that!
I try to avoid info-dumping the best I can. Especially when dealing with a setting that isn't regular, it's easy to fall into that trap xD

Yeah, I'm aware of the workload I want to take my time with this project. I work on it as if I was directing an anime or a tv-shows. It might not be the most efficient approach tho' haha! Thank you for checking on mobile and desktop, it's good to know that it works!

[darthmongoose]

This storyboard is excellent. That's really all the feedback I can give you. The composition of panels and use of the long scroll is really well thought-out, it's well-paced in setting up the mystery of what's going on and... yeah, it's really professional, you should just go for it!
Looking forward to seeing the finished product!

[nixxusnibelheim]

Damn! Thank you! It means a lot, it's really encouraging!

[nixxusnibelheim]

Updated with a new scene : https://imgur.com/a/0vvIk6T (Episode 1, part 1/5)
I edited the first post. I'm gonna use this thread to post all my storyboards.

Thank you for your time! I appreciate the help!

(the dialogues are not final, English isn't my native tongue so the sentences probably need some tweaking. Sorry for the inconvenience)